Divided

Sunsets will never forget you,

and neither will this town.

It's impossible for you to ever fully leave

these dirty concrete floors.

 

I waved as we parted in the airport.

I waved and I waved and I stared long

at the place where you stood before

you went out of sight.

 

As I walked home, the wind was slow but

harsh, greeting my uncovered skin

with a thousand cold kisses

as it pulled me deeper into its soothing core.

 

Your name carved into my bones

will never really fade and I

will never really stop looking into another sunrise

with the hope of finding you.

Reviews

[AJ Kristiansen]

Loved this so much little birdie!! Such strong images and I almost felt cold (in the hot and sweaty climate I'm in curently) with your description of wind giving you a thousand cold kisses... loved that image and certainly those last two lines of "never really stop looking into another sunrise with the hope of finding you" Wow!! Really love that... you've communicated a coldness and harshness but also tenderness at the same time through images of grey cold concrete and coloured sunrises.. fabulous!!! Well done!!

[Alana McGuire]

"will never really stop looking into another sunrise
with the hope of finding you."

These lines are really grasping at me. They stand out a lot and I can definitely realte to them. Well, I feel like I can relate to the poem as a whole, mostly.
Just as I enjoyed the other pieces I have read from you, I definitely enjoy this as well.

[Meghan]

This was great! I loved the imagery in this piece. You are really good at bringing the reader in. "Sunsets will never forget you, and neither will this town" and "Your name carved into my bones" were some of my favorite lines. Well done!

[Seshat Nidaba]

This poem moved me beyond what most poems should be capable of.

[Stammers]

I love the first two lines. There are some beautifully expressed ideas here.

[screamin'ian]

I am very impressed. Your insight and ability to express complex emotion is very mature. The imagery is stark and bold and real; I really feel like I am there, experiencing it as you are. Just so well done; I enjoyed reading it, even though it is so sad. The final verse is brilliant.

[Audrey Howitt]

Loved this piece--the flow and word choice just work so well---