The Sacrifice

My body, helpless, laying on the floor useless

Leaking crimson lies your truth stabbed into me

And as the dawn begins to break in

You happen to fear what you’ve done

The blood of an innocent life under the skin of your hands

 

(Chorus)

You killed me to break free

And get back at everything

You used me and hated me

But now I stand over you

And I’m watching you cry

My spirit will haunt you

Now that I’ve been sacrificed

 

Paranoid, you dare look over your shoulder

The mirror tells you “you’re about to go insane”

Rocking back and forth on the floor

You jump to find me trapped in the glass

My face laughing at you from this forever broken mirror

 

(Chorus)

 

Honey, please don’t cry

Revenge is really sweet

But you said, “f**k you and your life!”

Guess you know you can’t to trust me

 

(Chorus 2xs)

Author's Note

Honest opinion...

Reviews

[MissWordSmith]

My body, helpless, laying on the floor useless
Leaking crimson lies your truth stabbed into me
And as the dawn begins to break in
You happen to fear what you’ve done
The blood of an innocent life under the skin of your hands


This for me stands out the most. Particularly because I think it sums up the whole piece perfectly. The idea of someone regretting that they stabbed the truth into one who was leaking lies, and now fears that an irreversible damage has been done, intrigues me. Don't get me wrong, I think the concept is wonderfully new and perhaps bleak in the freshest sense.. if you know what I mean.
I love this... it definitely made me think and stop, and re read, and forced me to listen to what you were trying to say.
So, kudos to your writing skills and my comprehension I guess :P hehe.
Great work, keep writing! Sorry I've taken so long to review requests but I'm getting down to it.

[Amanda Naomi]

really well written..i like the thought that the ones we kill never really leave us, but rather stick around until their revenge is exacted!!

very nice

[trainwreck]

Very intense; it has a lot of potential. I look forward to reading more of your work.

[Liza]

bursting with aggressive emotion; a hint of blame and helplessness - creatively written

[Kelley]

This would be a very cool song Iris.
And by the way the last chorus cracked me up.
Thanks for sharing.

Kelley

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would love to hear the music behind the lyrics..what style would this be in? Lyrical content, it's powerful, dark and thoughtful..

[Dreamer<3]

I agree with DS Rollins.
Super!

[Arsenic Nemesis]

Very strong, presents a great amount of brutal imagery - I love it; keep it up!~

[cfix]

Shouldn't your chorus say "f**k you and your life" instead of "F**k you and you life" ?? I like it has a real good flow to it.

[lawrence bear]

great song, I can almost hear the electric guitar stringing this out with the beat of drums.