The Leader

The sweat dots his ebony back like the stars scattered in the sky
All scars and marks on his face symbolize the battles of a warrior
The innocence in his brown eyes burns with a flame from within

His ears straight forward as his attention is suddenly stolen
The voice in his head tells him to release the power in his legs
And he soars across the land in search of the source out of place

Racing the wind, his ears held in the air and his heart in the ground
His hooves keeping a perfect tempo with the earth's pulsing heart
His nostrils burn with the smell of life, dying and beginning again

He knows that he will not meet his demise until his purpose is over
His quest will be long, and hard to endure but he knows he will not fail
It is his purpose to protect the weak, aid the strong and listen to all

His huge heart beats with the equal immensity thrum of thunder
As his great lungs swell and then fall with the breath of the wind
And as night falls, he slowly becomes invisible in the night alone

The next rising sun, a faithful mother gives birth to her first
And as her soft brown eyes watch her baby boy stand for the first
Her heart grows, for she knows who their new leader will soon be

Author's Note

I love horses... I love their strength, wisdom, courage, movement, power, and love. I actually think they are more bold than that of the Bald Eagle.

Reviews

[r]

Holy freaking shicrapplez. *dies* That was amazing!! I flipping love horses - they're so beautiful and powerful and majestic and all the stuff you said in your a/n and what maddie said below. Lovelovelove this poem! It flowed and the word choice was to die for. The imagery almost killed me, and it was about horses so yeah.. Congrats on almost killng me. :D ...anywhooo, I freaking LOVE this poem!! :D

[MissWordSmith]

"the source out of place"
What a wonderful concept that the source of a thing is really out of place now!
I can't help but be wowed by this piece! The fierceness of your writing leaps off the page and attacks the reader. If I may suggest something though... perhaps the 4th stanza is unnecessary? It's like you build up the momentum as the horse builds up his, and in the 4th stanza the momentum suddenly breaks... I dunno, just a suggestion! :) Overall still my favorite piece of yours!!!! This was truly strong and exotic. Wonderful work!

[Kelley]

This was a beautiful poem Iris. I have a paint I know you would love.
I should put up some pics for you to see.
Beautiful poem thanks for sharing.

Kelley

[D S Rollins]

Awesome poem, I can see through the descriptions you do love horses!

[master squiggles]

Kay, I kinda think that was beautiful. :D I love horses too, they're so powerful and awesome and strong and courageous and everything you said in your review note.... So... yeah. I definitely loved this.

[FireWoman]

You captured your passion for horses very well. There is nothing stronger than the bond between that special animal & the human that loves it.

[Jonathan De Elvira]

This was so awesome, I imagine seeing a beautiful dark horse right now.

[Arsenic Nemesis]

Ah, this reminds me of my horse riding days~ This is wonderful, very captivating and really well written, I love it; keep up the good work!~