The Dead Will Dance

Stack upon stack, your hateful words weigh me down

Layer after layer, you skin me with your useless obsession

Scream over scream, you argue with me about who and what I am

Lie and lie, and lie to me again and see that I don’t make a fool out of you

Death among death, you’re going to kill me some day, and I can’t wait ‘til you do

And then that will be the day that the dead will sing and dance around you

 

Laugh among laugh, together they taunt you mercilessly

Strike and strike, they beat you with mallets, hammers, and clubs

Scream over scream, you yell again with the pain they feed your body

Crack after crack, the snap all of your bones from their joints and sockets

Plea upon plea, you cry up to God and ask Him not to let these demons take him away

But looks like God’s busy today, ‘cause the dead are done dancing and in Hell you will stay.

Author's Note

Those who disobey will be punished... and in Hell they will stay... *laughs evilly*

Reviews

[patricia]

I like the way each line started, and thought those two last lines were a nice touch. The whole poem is just the right length, your descriptions are good. Thankyou

[SilentVerses]

Gorgeous, really liked this, the length was perfect for the emotions and the story, brilliant piece.

[InkSlinger]

Love the imagery and the horror it delivers, enjoyed the first stanza completely. However, by the second stanza, the repeating chant of do unto others, laugh among laugh, strike and strike.. becomes distracting. After reading through the first time, I decided to go back and read it again, this time removing the beginning phrases in each line of the second stanza.. and found dropping them really polishes the poem, without taking away from it. Just a suggestion. Either way, a good solid effort..

[D S Rollins]

This is devious! Violent imagery!

[Arsenic Nemesis]

I like this a lot, really well written and very chilling indeed; I love it! Great job, keep it up!~

[Jonathan De Elvira]

"Death among death, you’re going to kill me some day, and I can’t wait ‘til you do" kinda harsh you know? but it also shows that you're really sad and depress soooooo..that worked...a painful read I must say..