A Loving Hate, In Which I Love To Fear

Your tears are drops of acid on my skin
Your words taste of lies on my tongue
Your embrace burns like being swallowed by flames.
Your love is cold as ice around my heart
And yet I don't fear you...

Your pain is the warmth inside of me
Your broken feelings are what make me smile
Your suffering is the remedy to all of my pain
Your hate is the love I always feel
And yet I don't hate you...

Your skin is hard as stone and lifeless
Your face is innocent, but reflected broken
Your hands bear the marks of a long, hard life
Your eyes are as cold as the black sun
And yet I won't leave you...

You can't help but to lose your breath for me
You would cut your skin, if for anyone, it'd be for me
You'd drink arsenic if I asked you sweetly
You'd hold my corpse as together, we fell asleep
And yet... I will always love you...

Reviews

[SilentVerses]

An absolutely perfect length, great structure, really love it, the images accompanying the words compliment it wonderfully a stunning twist on defining love.

[AbsentElements]

The power in this piece is almost overwhelming, which is a good thing. I love the way you describe every flaw, and then contradict it with the last line of each stanza. Amazing piece.

[~Angelic~]

Definitely powerful and true with relationships. Again very well done

[Amanda Naomi]

to me i have an image of a rather disfunctional relationship...and that although there are things in said relationship that don't quite work, no matter what the two people will always love eachother, and through that love the disfunctionality is obliterated..

i like it

[FireWoman]

Love hate love, that's what makes the world go 'round, nicely written.

[Senseless whatever]

Great write. Powerful and insightful. Looking at a relationship of abuse from the outside. Seeing the bad but feeling some good, interdependence. Great job.

[Albatross]

Each word cascades so wonderfully into the next, amplifying and resounding in each line. It feels haunted and beautiful. Lovely poem, excellent work..

[David W Moore III]

Sadness abounds and threatens to drown in tears of solitude round. Darkness enshroud my soul never proud clouding judgment in self-despite shroud.
David

[Charles]

Sounds like a keeper, you'd better hold on to this one. :)

[nightmask]

very beautiful and soft imagery i think this poem would be your best so far it's so tragic and it connects so well each line. amazing job keep up the good work :]