Into Pieces...

Held together by insignificant things
(Broken, alone, and bleeding)
You hold all you have left close to you
(Because it's what you need)
to stay sane...

Hated by many, you still roam this earth
(Now all you do is wonder why)
Because all who loved you are now gone
(And you long to be with them)
so you cry...

You ask yourself,
When you'll see them again
You keep yourself
Away from the pain within
Though it seems
That it's your only morphine
To keep yourself
From ripping all you loved
Into pieces...

Held together by all that's left of you...
You hear the angels plea their last cry...
You feel your heart finally snap in two...
And you no longer have to wonder why...

Reviews

[loowzerX]

Excellent write girl :)

[Matthew Kult]

Hello Lisette,

I like the format, I thought when I first saw the page it would be a group of random writes tossed together but the overall piece flowed very well. An excellent write. Excellent work.

Regards,

Matthew

[Senseless whatever]

Excellent write. Great format for this write.

[AbsentElements]

This made me feel my own pain in every word. It's deep, and very emotional. I can see you really understand this concept. Very nice piece.

[Charles]

For someone so young, you do have a grasp of despair. Keep em' coming.

[lawrence bear]

makes me feel immortal, like it is me walking the earth alone and empty. a good piece you have penned.

[David W Moore III]

Powerful. Your words seemed whispered yet they screamed off the page. I loved how you made the emotion mine. Good job. Two minor suggestions that might help with meter and I don't think would otherwise impact the poem (it's yours so do what you want). If you took out because in the first stanza and the last you in the second stanza, it flows a bit better. But that's just me. You may like it better the way it is.