Needs Repair

Needs Repair

A Poem by Lipstick_Lesbian
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My grandfather, Aaron Shapiro, used to carry my poetry with him in his pockets wherever he went. The night he died, I thought I would never write again.

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The sound of his voice tipped me off
That something in the universe had broken.
As reality shattered
Scattering sharp shards in every direction
One of them nicked my father's vocal chords
Because my father
The public speaker
The university professor
The speech and debate national champion
His voice 
cracked.
"I'm so so--cough--rry.
My love, he didn't make it."
Then
Another crack
Plastic striking linoleum
Broken batteries and buttons
My head and my heart
Hitting the cold hard floor.

© 2012 Lipstick_Lesbian


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"Scattering sharp shards in every direction
One of them nicked my father's vocal chords"

I really thought this hit home. The allusion to a terrorist bomb and its traumatic lasting memories is very effective in conveying the horror and sadness of the death.

Hope my poem "Elders" didn't bring back too many bad memories!

You end it well too. "Plastic striking linoleum" makes me think that there's something that becomes artificial in us when a loved one dies, if just for that split second.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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such fragmented images to bring together the saddest tragedy with out breath: amazing stuff

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Such intensity. Wow. A beautifully written poem.
Really great work.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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I am truly taken aback by the combination of love, power and pain that comes through in this. Beautifully written, with a raw energy that cannot be ignored. Thank you for this.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Hits me extremely close to home... It brought tears me to eyes as well... A lovely poem, and the way you expressed the emotion was superb! Your grandfather should be really, really proud of you!

Posted 12 Years Ago


A very sad poem. To lose someone you cared for is always hard. I like the story and the how you ended this powerful poem. I believe the best thing we can do. Is remember the good people and follow their example. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 12 Years Ago



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Lipstick_Lesbian
Lipstick_Lesbian

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