Your Fate

Not sure how I feel about this one. Definitely more straight forward than some of my other pieces.

Fate

Whose recipient?

 

A blindly present gesture,

Anticipating that intended?

Or waiting, dormant, following,

Momentary? Or situational?

Destined, effortless, uncontrolled?

Or mindful, desired, deserved?

 

If latter’s true, by all means try.

If former, when?

Mind or body?

Heads or tails?

 

Who walks, who doesn’t,

Matters less than you who wait.

Working toward self remedy.

You know its chemistry,

Tasted its absence.

Bear such void in quiet volition.

Buy into potential,

Passionate energy’s mate.

 

The ball’s on the cliff,

Climb faster and fierce,

To reach that which could be.

And push, knowing full well,

Your control.

Your fate.

Reviews

[Crow]

Truly a thought provoking piece, Great job!

[Amit Parmessur]

Definitely a good piece though I admit many parts eluded me. That's what is called a good poem...

Who walks, who doesn’t,
Matters less than you who wait.

These words are impressive.

[Jon]

Great write, thoughts going every which way. Good job::D

[Orlando Murcia]

It seems like you had a lot
in your mind while you wrote this

It was great reading this piece

You had so much to say in such
a short write

Nicely done

[Antonio Valentino]

Lindsay, this was exceptional. Even brilliant in some parts. This one is going in my library!

Very well done!
Antonio

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

To me this is a poetic pep talk... straight forward but very insightful and philosophical.

[Kieran James McGovern]

the very open questioning is really a thing of profundity... your alliteration/use of language as music is hard for anyone to match i think... good work!

[Poet's World]

Very much inspiring poem, its not fate alone that decides our life, even our effort counts and
YOUR CONTROL
YOUR FATE

lovely lines.....
on the whole, its a fantastic poem

[James Paulin]

Implying the power of determination and persistence, you have written a poem that challenges those who need inspiration to aspire to succeed. I like the format and theme of this inspirational piece.

[Bella-Marie]

This poem literally took my breath away! I loved every little bit of it... from the straight-fowardness that you weren't sure of, to the hint of cryptic-ness that was hidden under all of the obvious.
Beautiful.