Communicate her

Interpret this how you will ;)

Whisper through your eyes.
Find me with your touch.
Inhale with your ears.
The air is thick and empty,
Void of all less truthful,
Black and blank and scribbled,
Blotted out with color.
Memories are stronger now,
Here on out they travel.
Thinking, sensing,
The smell widens the sight.
Expanding the self, now stronger.
Panoramic tastes of summer,
Engulf the cells,
Waiting for yours.
Communicate her.
 

Reviews

[Antonio Valentino]

My interpration is probably different then others, but nevertheless, I really enjoyed it!

Good writing here Lindsay!
Antonio

[Clockwork]

I like how you cross the jobs of the senses. To me this speaks of a women that you would have to transcend sensory details, maybe even planes of reality, in order to effectively describe her. I like the line "Panoramic tastes of summer" The most. It presents a little microcosmic through which to view the rest of the piece.

[Bella-Marie]

Well done. It seemed very intamate in a writing way (so no... ew bits) and so very artistic.
Apart from one line.
"Inhale with your ears."
I'm sorry, but that seemed kind of crazy, and didn't fit. It seemed to sound like the song "Listen to a rainbow", because the lyrics go as this -
"Listen with your eyes
Listen with your eyes
and hear everything you see"
And so I was put off-balance for a bit... until I got involved (so to speak) in the poem once more.
However, overall well done.

[xXx]

meditating, centering on the one i would love .. inhaling her soul until i am consumed .. prepared to share my feelings for her to another .. love love love this .. very deep and personal .. peaceful imagery

[C-Trainer]

yay... lindsay is bak! i like it man good job, i have no idea what you are talking about but in my head i see something so thats good.