I've never been all that good at writing; but I love it with a passion.
Please let me know what I've done good on and what I need to improve please and thank-you.
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I think you have a good idea. I don't think you've done anything wrong, per se, but as I read, I sort of felt like some of the rhymes were 'easy'. That is, they seemed like really obvious rhymes. There's nothing wrong with that, really, it just sort of made me feel like I was reading something from my teen years.
I did, however, really like the line 'and sip from my optimistic cup'. Not sure why.
I think you have a good idea. I don't think you've done anything wrong, per se, but as I read, I sort of felt like some of the rhymes were 'easy'. That is, they seemed like really obvious rhymes. There's nothing wrong with that, really, it just sort of made me feel like I was reading something from my teen years.
I did, however, really like the line 'and sip from my optimistic cup'. Not sure why.
I've been writing for a long time but I've never really been good at it! I love writing with a passion and I'm going to do it whether or not people enjoy it, Because I enjoy it. more..