The Wind

thoughts about the wind

The wind sways it's over bearing hips

An exotic dancer of the winter sky

Twisting and turning

Tossing and churning

Thrusting its magnificent weight against all those who oppose

 

Arrogant and harsh in all her ways

She speaks in muffled roars and tainted whispers

Her silent magic manipulating the trees

Millions of arms at her disposal

Swaying and slashing those who interrupt her tantalizing dance

 

A beautiful woman

With the coldest of fronts

Reviews

[St.Jimmy]

nice to read ......brilliantly written
good thoughts about wind
good job!
Keep up the good work!
~Aaradhya

[Liverpoolfan]

This is very interesting. The poem itself is excellent. It''s very well written. And the lines flow from one to the other easily. Like a soft gentle breeze, in fact. OK, that gentle breeze comment was a bit stupid, but it sort of fits... Kind of. Anyway, back to my point... Each line flows from one to the other. And this keeps the reader the readers attention, and makes them want to read. While you read this poem, you sort of forget about how long it is, or how short it is, and just focus on the next word. Clearly, your a very talented writer.
Also, I've sort of failed to mention how you've captured some of the raw power that is the wind, and put it down on paper. The description used is also quite good. This is a great write. Well done.

[thecoolone52]

ehy that was really goooooood, i liked the erotic dancer line.......... who doesnt like erotic dancers?? haha, anyway i liked the imagrey and it flows really well............. very nice job.........

[Kevin S.]

One word...WOW! This was a very visualizing poem. As I read I could see the a tree fighting against the wind. Slashing and clawing at the air. Awesome use of discription. This could be an award winner!

[C. Porter]

Oooh, good one. I like it. Great way to describe the wind..
My favorite lines are
~*~
Arrogant and harsh in all her ways
She speaks in muffled roars and tainted whispers
Her silent magic manipulating the trees
~*~