Love Me When I'm Gone

The pillow beckons sleep

The smell of cologne Obsession

But the person who wore it is gone

“So long”

 

We sat in the gully

In a smoky stare

Before we lost it all

We were there

 

The future was silent

The rings were tossed

We lost

To the clock

 

We couldn’t be friends

We mend

And then bend

Only to contend in opposing corners of the ring

 

You say you’re still in love

A blow of seven years of power

The words so sour

To ears that lost their patience

 

I stare in disrepair

Speaking to the phone

My hearts not home

“Love me when I’m gone”

Reviews

[Brook]

This is beautiful, and emotive.
Such a lovely write! Nicely done.

[Saddam]

The future was silent
The rings were tossed
We lost
To the clock
A lovely poetry you had created my friend....lovely but heart broken...beautifully done your work.

[Neon]

I stare in disrepair
Speaking to the phone
My hearts not home
“Love me when I’m gone”

So, Lovely and so Heartfelt stanza is this. This poem's totally about love that's well penned from the heart.. with the heart of the heart. Very great poem. All phrases are well written with the proper usage of words.

By the way, I hate seeing someone as beautiful as you feel sad and alone but I hope your love knows that how lucky he's to be with you making you ever smiley because everybody loves keeps angels happy. Anyway, Nice write!

May you love keep you in the bucket of flowers to make you always smiley!
Take-Care!

[Avoiry]

This was actually written because a person I was engaged to seven years ago sent me a text saying he thought he was still in love with me and it had come to light while he was talking to his most recent ex. Ifought hard to fix us once but I moved on and this came way to late.

[Neon]

I hate seeing someone as beautiful as you cry. I hate that guy who left you alone into the world with tears and I hope he never knew how lucky he was to be with you at all.

Anyway, the time is been gone, you are now free from this cage, you've yer freedom and eternity to live. Don't worry, May this new come with allot of happiness in your beautiful life to make your ever happy in this world just as same as an angel as you are.

Keep smiling!
May God Bless You!

[J. Alfred Prufrock]

This is interesting. In have one called "the milk of ash" that has a similair line at the end. we must be kindred souls. great minds think alike. lol this is well done, I really enjoyed it.
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