A Tiny Safteypin on the floor

This is a poem about a fallen soul who is desperate to live, but no one will stop to even pick it up.

There is a safterpin on the floor,

It's old and bent,

It's all alone in a puddle of water,

Wating and hoping,

That maby,

Just maby,

Someone would care to pick it up.

The top is bent, and a little broken,

And it can't seem to fix itself.

It tries and tries,

To perhaps bee seen,

Then finally it realizes,

That even being seen, no one will care.

It begs,

"Oh, please pick me up,"

It questions,

"Please won't someone claim me?

Why will no one fix me?"

But most of all,

It cries out in pain,

"Please help me, I want to live!"

But no matter how long it cries,

No matter how much it begs,

No one is willing to stop what they want,

And help a hopeless soul.

Oh, tiny little saftypin,

Hopeless little thing,

I pray that some day,

You will be saved.

Oh, little saftypin,

Hopeless little thing,

If I ever find you along my sight,

I promise I will save you.

Reviews

[Ben Campbell]

Yes, I love that metaphor. I know that feeling when you're trying to get someone to notice and help you, and then you realize that even if they did notice they wouldn't help. It's an awful feeling, and you managed to get it across.
I actually think that misspellings can contribute to the mood of a poem, especially one about confusion. Evidence: E E Cummings.

[TheFemininePad]

Beautiful. Absolutely beautiful. I like this poem. I think this is a poem that people can relate to when they want attention for other people. A lost soul that just wanders around. It's never enough to live, for you have to have something to live for. This poem really helps to highlight that.

[Linear]

But just not this night.

Sorry about that, couldn't resist, a broken saftypin, all alone a good metaphor, for a broken and lonely person, crying out in the night, for someone to noyice someone to help. lovely work, small spelling errors, but minor and did not distract from your wonderful poem