Vacancy

Vacancy

A Poem by LR Young

there is an appetite
in warm weather, a desire
to speak in just the right
syllable, transcending
the garrulous, to conjure and
coax from the ribs,
the rise, the growth
of feeling, needing both
a birthing
and a name;
having none of this
she shirks the anxious aching,
the tremble of birds,
raking
through the coals; all
the burned down acres,
a burnished
vacancy
in words. So very weary
of the languid picking
apart of anguished
petals, like
a fortune teller,
a daisy is hardly
a crystal ball.

© 2009 LR Young


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Wow! I truly enjoyed reading and rereading this a number of times! Straight to my list!!! I love the vivid almost abstract imagery and your use of analogies to paint a beautiful picture.
At first i thought she is looking for a specific word an indescribable word to go with the feeling and couldn't find it (vacancy). And i would have responded forget the search of the word, enjoy the feeling and the word would be revealed.lol!!! Then after rereading again i recognised the daisy representing "the loves me loves me not" syndrome. I guess that word is still what she searches for. Beautifully written!
Thank You for sharing!

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Wow! I truly enjoyed reading and rereading this a number of times! Straight to my list!!! I love the vivid almost abstract imagery and your use of analogies to paint a beautiful picture.
At first i thought she is looking for a specific word an indescribable word to go with the feeling and couldn't find it (vacancy). And i would have responded forget the search of the word, enjoy the feeling and the word would be revealed.lol!!! Then after rereading again i recognised the daisy representing "the loves me loves me not" syndrome. I guess that word is still what she searches for. Beautifully written!
Thank You for sharing!

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This was a nice, lucid poem that seemed like art of the eyes (because it had a word per line) and then food for thought.

Posted 15 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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LR Young
LR Young

Boulder, CO



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LR Young completed her Masters in Literature in Spring of 2009. Her current emphasis is poetry, the intimacy of words and string of consciousness revelations, rhythm and imagery. It is just as Ginsber.. more..

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