Must be a fault in my code

My eyes are changing black

My teeth are aching

Curse my heart and claw my skin

It's all too funny isn't it?

Her brain is black,

Her veins has stopped pumping.

All her vitals stopping,

Only herself to blame.

Laughing at the moon.

Creature of the night among them.

Even if she's fully conscious,

It's a devilish sight to see.

Author's Note

Reviews

[dan]

PLUS really good choice for musical accompaniment. Again, well done. take care...dan

[dan]

The guy is painfully viewing a love coming to an end, cancerous voids joining together for the kill shot. A very descriptive write that still leaves the reader guessing. Making the reader think is always a risky tack but worth the risk in the end. Well done. take care...dan

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed the use of the good description.
"Laughing at the moon.
Creature of the night among them.
Even if she's fully conscious,
It's a devilish sight to see."
The above words. I did like a lot. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[AaronFreitas]

I was going to suggest the same as Willard but I just saw it :) I enjoyed the write Riv :)

[Willard Wells]

One small suggestion "Her veins has stopped' change the "has" to "have"

Interesting write that seems to have a personal message in it.

[B]

I see in this write
separating from a man she is dying without him
slowly