Shift my weight

Bite my tongue,
Shift my weight.
As I lie asleep.
My dreams instigate.
What do I fear,
Do I rake.
My body yearns,
For that quake.
Drink my own blood,
So that yours is in tact.
Cold these walls,
They conquer yours.
Send me flowers,
And I'll throw you mine.
Love with all my worth,
Love that isn't the worst.
Am I a danger, dear.
But, I want to be with you.
Shift my weight,
Wake me up.

Author's Note

Quelt Isokan's thoughts to her husband Ren Isokan in her dreams

Reviews

[dan]

Nicely done, Riv, but be careful with your spelling and punctuation. Spelling? Instead of in tact it is one word, intact. The best poetic idea can become derailed by careless spelling, tenses and punctuation. You're a good writer so you should take more care in proofreading your work before it's posted. take care...dan

[Amber Lily]

I detect something monstrous... I like it. It feels like there is something this character is hiding but is itching it get out. Well, at least that's what I think. I love poems based of characters, great work :)

[Willard Wells]

Dreams can bring great memories, but when you want to wake and you are so far into the dream, it becomes os real I hope you wake soon.

[Coyote Poetry]

I truly liked this poem. Real life and directness. My favorite.
"But, I want to be with you.
Shift my weight,
Wake me up."
I liked the above lines. Thank you Riv for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote