In Sensations

The patterns dance across the walls,

It's to late in these halls.

Every step that makes a sound,

I'm not ready to rebound.

Take a step back in fear,

What became very clear.

These cages that we hold dear,

They seem to be near.

Locked up without a key,

Must be with me.

Taped down in my throat,

Locked down remote.

So detonate on the spot,

Deny retry.

Maybe when the morning comes,

There will be more suns.

Author's Note

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_DjOaznpnaA

Reviews

[dan]

Riv, I don't know if I've told you this before, but your writing in the last few months is evolving into a much higher plane of relevance. The message within the piece is always delivered with implied importance, a type of muffled urgency. In other words, your work is maturing, making its way up to a higher level...Improving a lot. Now a tip: If you want your writing to really grab the reader with no distractions, do away with spelling and punctuation mistakes. There was only one misspelling but it was in the second line, making it more noticeable. Other than that little boo-boo, this write is kickass. Keep writing. take care...dan

[Riv]

Omgosh xD I went to look and saw it straight away. I feel sort of stupid for making that mistake.

[dan]

We all do that. The trick is to do a quick look-see before clicking 'Send.' A quick self-edit...dan

[Willard Wells]

A personal write I think and well done. Thanks,

[B]

Moving on
after a bruised break up
Oh its hard
But for the right person
Oh it happens

Amazing as always ..... your words are so special

[Perkele.7885]

You are ready to have your throat detonated to release the key to all the cages that seem to be near that everyone holds dear. You are so gallant. Who is to open the cages? Who will control the maybe that there maybe will be more suns?

[Riv]

I had to read this over twice xD Those are some very good questions.

[Perkele.7885]

I am just asking the questions that seem logical to me? and what explosive was used to blow up your throat?