I'm tired

It's like a feather has crossed my path,

so white and pure.

When I first caught that feather,

it was soft.

Eventually it went without care,

it became brittle. 

One day that feather broke, 

and I cried for hours. 

Then, I didn't cry at all.

You only get one chance at everything,

so why try anyway?

It doesn't give you a pass. 

I'm in a dark room now,

with no direction.

I used to be able to pinpoint the stars,

now I can barely see my feet.

Author's Note

Life is hard.

Reviews

[Willard Wells]

Well try to stay with in sight of the light. I like this but as we know it is very dark and maybe a portal to your heart. We do seem to write our best from that dark place and this is a very well written work.Thanks,

[Riv]

Thank you for the review

[Jesse]

Liked it. It builds a bit and leaves one thinking that we missed something someplace in the poem maybe but the author (you) don't clearly let on. I liked it!

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

Brilliant poem. Simple, but so imaginative and vivid. The feather changing from pure white to brittle and breaking. Like life went from having a purpose to pure darkness where you cannot see anything. Magnificent!

[Samhitha Mopati]

You are an emerging poet with a pondering imagination!
Keep bestowing your poetry upon us! :)
The description of the feather is illustrious. I totally loved the way one could even think of a feather.
You see, life is like a boat-ride. When struck by the fickle-minded weather, the ride becomes worthy and interesting! Hardships compliment hard-work like no other!

[dan]

LimnoH, Such magnificently vivid imagery against such a stark backdrop. This piece is so nonchalant that it can pass under the radar yet when one reads it one is blinded by the white-hot intensity of the emotional underpinnings. I wish you knew how talented you are. take care...dan

[Jamestown]

Your authors note says it all, "life is hard"
So darn true, but when the going gets tough the though get going!
Hard times are character builders and we will have plenty of opportunity
during our lives to build, stay strong my talented friend!
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!