Out of Sync

We are fire,

we are ice,

burnt out desires,

will not suffice.

So belligerent,

so on purpose,

so deliberate.

Why must we do this?

Can this end?

Let's be friends?

Back and forth, the arguing.

Look at the current events,

We are nothing, out of sync;

why must we do this,

you must rethink..

To let us dissolve,

we are no longer in love.

Author's Note

ignore grammar/spelling errors

Reviews

[Wórdsmíth]

There`s much depth hidden behind the course of your insightful words. Yea, I do agree with you that "we`re no longer in love" cos, may be, we`ve got distracted by the lanes of "unkind", "desirable"--desperate love which`s, of course, a form of peace but we, sometimes, give it a wrong pair of shoes which`s why ... the whole universe becomes outta sync. Beautiful work as always!

[Limitality]

Yet another kind review from you, I am please to hear you liked it! Indeed, the universe does become out of sync sometimes, thank you.

[JD Jessop]

Good read. This happens every day all over the world. Love fades and goes away. Good job!

[Limitality]

Thank you so much!

[Not Your Typical New Yo..]

Ah. The total opposites, not heat and one cold, might not get along too tell, but can these opposites ever know each other, can they just be friends? I like how played with this theme here. And of course the metaphor of human relationships to one another. Very truthful.

[Limitality]

I am glad you enjoyed, total opposites indeed! I however do not believe friendship can evolve through this. Thank you so much

[Ashfallen]

The whole concept of this resonates with me deeply.

I think I was confused just a touch by "you must rethink"... does that mean only the other person needs a change in perspective? Or maybe "we must rethink" would make more sense in the context? Or is this meant to indicate that the writer has already reached the conclusion of rethinking?

In any case, I thought the emotion of this was great. The flow and rhyme weren't as tight as I would like, but still a great effort.

[Limitality]

Yes I assume I would have meant we... However each flaw now how's only made it so much more beautiful, don't you think? I do not write rough drafts, this is just raw emotion onto writerscafe and posted. Yes I rethink of it everyday, it's a destructive path however I did leave. Finally. I will keep a watch out for my flow and rhyme thanks for taking the time to read my work.

[The Twin Arenas]

yeah, sad. poems about women telling men that they don't love them anymore are terrifying to read.

[The Twin Arenas]

oh, good poem.

[Limitality]

destructive relationships should never last, thank you for reading

[The Twin Arenas]

ya indeed.

[Blogger]

This is well written and dynamic. And sad too!

[Limitality]

Thank you so much!