In My Dreams

 

 

The crippling pain of loss,

for once was immense passion.

I am thorn crowned and nailed to the cross,

dripping blood,

a flood of emotions for once was something great.

Dragged into the dark abyss,

for us it is too late.

Do you ever fear not knowing? Where are you when I needed you?

I am drowning in this fire,

dissolved into once was, what will you do?

Nothing. You have no desire!

We are nothing but a burning bridge, falling to pieces.

Captivated, even by your cruelty...

I am but a prisoner to your sick twisted games, release me.

Can you not see,

I am merely,

suffocating;

Slowly dragging me around,

I am losing my sound,

my voice is hoarse from silent screams.

We are at peace in my dreams.

Author's Note

ignore grammar/spelling errors.

Reviews

[Ashfallen]

Wow, ouch. What a dramatic, over-the-top piece of pain you have here! This is hard to read, but the conveyance of emotion is done quite well.

[Limitality]

Thank you, it's greatly appreciated your review

[HungryGhost]

Woah, I totally loved reading this. Care to review my latest? Thanks :)

[Limitality]

I would love to return the favour, thanks for reading!

[HungryGhost]

Thanks, and you're welcome :)

[Blogger]

Very intense and original! I read it a few times since its gripping.

[Limitality]

Thank you! I very much appreciate it, I am glad it had caught your attention to read more than once!

[Blogger]

You have talent i see. I am glad you came back. :0)

[Limitality]

That's very sweet of you :) I'm glad I did too! You're very talented yourself!

[Blogger]

Thank you! That means a lot since you are established here and have had success too. :0)

[Limitality]

Aww! I wouldn't say established but thanks so much! :D

[Blogger]

Is there something you have written that you especially want reviewed? I would be happy to!

[Limitality]

Whichever of my poems catches your eye! :)

[Blogger]

ok. well that is great. I look forward to reading more of your stuff. You are good!

[Limitality]

You are much better! Thank you, it means a lot to me :)