Once

Our words can either build up or tear down

I once looked at you
With such admiration and desire
But the words you spoke
Sent me into a downward spiral
Of an emotional hell.

My heart was split open
I could no longer see
The damage your words caused
Caused my soul to bleed.

I now tremble when you speak
For fear of what you'll say
You apologize over and over
Then ask me to stay
With you.

Is this what it's meant to be?
Walking on egg shells in fear
If I make a mistake,
It's your tone of anger I'll hear.

I've stayed far too long
As a prisoner of your hate
I refuse to stay here
In this painful emotional state.

Reviews

[Crowley]

Yeah, great look at the dysfunction that is some relationships. As hard as it is, you gotta keep your respect and dignity and get the hell on down the road. Your pace and tone were nice and fitting for the piece and I could feel the frustration and angst. Great job!!

[Levi Levin]

You did a great job with this piece...great rhythm with your rhyme as well...keep up the good work!