The Missed and the Missing

A poem of comparison between those who are missing and those who miss them.

When it comes to life people move on,

And even though it’s commonly known,

They’re still missed when they’re gone,

And on the faces of those left behind it’s shown.

 

Whether it be by a sudden death,

Or simply falling out of love,

When they leave they almost take your breath,

As if they flew away with it like a dove.

 

For some reason the feeling left behind is worse,

Then anything that’s felt when they’re there,

It’s almost as if they left behind a terrible curse,

And really the loss is enough, the pain is not fair.

 

Of course on the other side of everything,

People tend to like being missed by others.

To some it’s a new sort of exciting,

When they’re on the mind of friends, loves or mothers.

 

Wanting and missing go hand in hand,

The want of them to be there and the want to be wanted,

It seems to be greater when the leave is unplanned,

And when the one left behind is with memories, haunted.

 

So whether it might be that it’s a need or a want,

Or maybe there really is something missing in that empty space,

I’m tired of the waiting which is now almost a taunt,

And I’d rather you were back here with me in this place.

Author's Note

what do you think of the structure? anything incorrect? what would this be considered poetically?

Reviews

[Porter]

So I really like the way in which you think about "the missed and the missing" in this poem. I can tell a lot of thought went in to this. The only thing I would be careful of is trying too hard to make things rhyme. While it is a great thing to be able to rhyme seamlessly in poems, sometimes it just becomes a burden, like something you have to do, because "that's what poems are." Try just writing in a rhythmic way, and if words happen to rhyme without too much thought, then it's all the more beautiful. Keep it up. :) ~Never Forget

[Lily Avenue]

Thanks so much. I completely agree and that was my only qualm when writing this (it was a school project though, so the requirements were MAKE IT RHYME.) But in hindsight, had I written this for my own reasons, I'd have definitely gone a different route. Thanks for the feedback and for reading. :)