The Park Bench

I wrote this very late at night, so it's nothing grand, but I like it (:

I waited for you for hours, I waited for you today.
I sat and watched the birds as the minutes ticked away.
This isn’t the first time you’ve done it, left me here to wait.
Actually it happens quite often, it isn’t an act of fate.
They ask me why I sit here and act like it’s alright,
‘If he doesn’t come today he surely won’t be there tonight’.
I tell them love is patient, love is kind, love is true,
And that is why I sit here, darling, I’ll always wait for you.

Reviews

[zainul]

You have depicted a real lover who is waiting anxiously.Reading the first four lines,
I could visualize a lovely girl on the park bench and who was cursing(!) her lover
for his indifference and irresponsibility.
But,my idea became wrong when I read the last two lines.
Really,a real lover knows what loves means.
Congratulations for the great write.

[DalainaRenee]

This tells a cute little story! I enjoyed it!

[A. V. Madison]

A piece that anyone can relate to. Waiting on a man. This is also a very versitale piece, because if you shift the words a little, it could easily mean waiting on life, God, help, sanity, etc. And those, my darling- are the hardest piece to write. I enjoyed this very much Lily dear.

Love From California,
Maddie

[Lily Allison]

Thank you so much!

[A. V. Madison]

No problem. By the way, I'm very jealous of your hair in your profile picture xD

[Lily Allison]

You're so sweet, thank you! Your hair is lovely (:

[A. V. Madison]

Oh that's not me! But I look VERY similar to that girl. We could be indentical twins xD

[Legolas]

This is such a magnificent poem and outlines what true love is. I loved it! Wonderful job!

[Aiden Aloysius]

Like it, but still think she should ditch his sorry a*s! Great flow.

[Lily Allison]

Haha, maybe someday she will! (:

[Zainab UF]

A short, simple and beautiful poem about an excruciatingly long wait. Loved it! :)

[....]

THis is wonderful, love the ending,
sweet wonderful write.

[Lily Allison]

Thank you!

[demureminds]

This is such a sweet poem. I definitely, did not expect the ending, but I liked how you turned the negatives around and switched it up a little.

[Lily Allison]

Thanks! (:

[Arik]

I like it; the pacing and rhyme are good, and it's interesting because I expected this to be another break up poem as I was reading it, but instead ended on almost a sad note of being in love with someone who is no good for you.

[Lily Allison]

Thank you. (: