Silence

Silence

A Poem by Sarmelendez

The air is still like dead silence
you can hear the heartbeats
the blood rushing though the veins
the smell of uncertainty in the air
the heart beating faster making 
the blood pulsing faster with each 
breath the mind racing to where it 
cant keep up with it self 
you see fear off the waters reflection

© 2013 Sarmelendez


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This piece speaks to me of the phobia that is incurred when one in not being able to swim. I liked the imagery alot. I felt that the flow was a bit off in the second half though, as if you might have been trying to keep the lines the same length, rather than each line being one complete sentence or phrase.
Over all it had alot of potential.

Aaron

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sarmelendez

11 Years Ago

thank you, i was going for fear in a sence that you could not descibe it. Like when you get spooked .. read more



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What is fear?? It's a hard thing to write about with many of us experiencing it differently. You have captured this well Sarah. The heightened senses, the heart beating so hard it can be heard, or minds race away with the thought of fear itself. All relative to to the point of being scared.

Well done.

Regards
Troy

Posted 10 Years Ago


Sarmelendez

10 Years Ago

thank you i write alot based off emotion
Troy Henson

10 Years Ago

keep going...good stuff:)
Sarmelendez

10 Years Ago

thank you glad you like it
This piece speaks to me of the phobia that is incurred when one in not being able to swim. I liked the imagery alot. I felt that the flow was a bit off in the second half though, as if you might have been trying to keep the lines the same length, rather than each line being one complete sentence or phrase.
Over all it had alot of potential.

Aaron

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sarmelendez

11 Years Ago

thank you, i was going for fear in a sence that you could not descibe it. Like when you get spooked .. read more
stunning

Posted 11 Years Ago


Sarmelendez

11 Years Ago

thanks
One word : awesome...:)

Posted 11 Years Ago


Sarmelendez

11 Years Ago

thank you
Sami Khalil

11 Years Ago

My pleasure...:)

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Sarmelendez
Sarmelendez

Joplin, MO



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