Mother Hubbard 2.0

Old mother Hubbard, reworked into my own version of a nursery rhyme... A CURSERY RHYME! new project alert

Old Mother Hubbard,
Dead in her cupboard,
Missing her jugular vein.
Her dog on the ground,
A ravenous hound,
Chewing her quivering brain.

© 2015 Charlotte aspin

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Help with beat is always welcome

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Misery

The beat is beautiful. The poem is short (I am partial to short poems) and to the point. I like it.
A question: might there be another word to replace 'quivering'? Quivering suggests she is still alive.

Posted 9 Years Ago

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Added on August 1, 2015
Last Updated on August 1, 2015
Tags: Nursery, rhyme, fairy tale, dog, mother, Hubbard, brain, gore, death

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Charlotte aspin

Rotherham, South Yorkshire , United Kingdom

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Hi! I'm Charlotte Aspin, and I am super lame. I've written for myself and others since 2003. I've been included in several small poetry and prose publications, for school and library purposes, and ha.. more..