Ex

You look in my eyes

those cold dark eyes

hateful and careless

your holding an knife

standing tal

staring at me

im scared

wondering what your doing

it's raining so hard

every drop of water is pounding my face

im like an opossum playing dead

but im about to be dead

now im staring in his eyes

guys like that is crazy

then i notice it's my ex

he's crying and whispering

hissing like an snake

i grab an stake

he dro the knife

i drop the stake

he went to his knee's

he looked weak now

i crawl to him

gave him an long hug

and said im sorry

Reviews

[Vartul]

Hmmm.Lets see.First of all,you'll have to work on your grammar and spelling. Why don't you use SpellCheck software? Otherwise, it's a good piece.You'll have to improve a lot in many areas,but i'll tell you something.Writing is not something that can be taught.It is inherent.One may have a Doctorate in Language,but it doesn't imply that he/she is a good writer.But i feel that you have that inherent ability, and with a little improvement you'll go along way.My advice is that you should read a lot of books.
Keep Writing!