WEIGHED DOWN

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There is a burden on my back....

It's heavy....

Like Guilt.....that sinks in.....ever staying.....and ever changing......

 

 

But never LEAVING. 

 

 

But a hand reached down.....just as I fell.....and wiped my tears.....

 

 

And brushed the burden from my back as if it were a small pebble......

 

 

Yet no matter what.......how many times the One could help......I'd pick the burden up again...

 

 

And carry it on.....until finally......He took it over.......and carried it......

 

 

 

.......................TO THE CROSS

Author's Note

please comment. I'm open to anything....even if it's something negative

Reviews

[C. C. Burl]

Oh, I really like this. The elipses (. . .'s) add so much to the heavy, whiny, foreverness that comes with a burden. Yes, He took my icky burden to the Cross too. I'm just learning to give it all over, everything, to Him. Love it, love it, love it.

[<Abby.Autopsy>]

thankyou i just kind of sat down and wrote it one day because i was bored and it came out...idk what i do but i just kind of write what is on my heart and mind at the time i guess. i get things like this inspired by my youth group friends. it's great to have people like that to inspire you and im nothing without them.

[Veralily]

I loved it. Very deep and very abstract. I like how you made it slow and subtle. Great job.