You Speak To Me

When a person stays with you because the can but doesn't really love you at all

You talk to me like I'm nothing

like I'm the dirt caked up in 

your

nice

leather

Louis Vuitton

how dare I step an inch?

You speak to me like I'm the ache

in your eyes

in your life

in the pit

of your 

rotting stomach

How dare I speak your name!

You say you love me

and maybe somewhere you do

but I can't help noticing

the scowl when I look at you

What have I done to deserve

such filth from your lips?

Slowly caressing...

empty finger tips

When I touch you I know

I know

You feel nothing

It is evident by the absence

of depth in your eyes

Like a cold winter's day

shut off

locked up 

is where you keep that heart

No matter how much I knock

you never let me in

let me in

let me in

let me in

I beg you endlessly

but you don't care

you look at me

look back in the mirror

and admire your long black hair

the blackened waves

of your endless mane'

remind me

that

all is lost

you will never love me

you speak to me with 

condemnation on your tongue

contempt swirling in your lungs

Just let me go 

stop pulling me around

No longer can I be

pushed back into the ground

But I,

no I

won't bother you again

if you tell me one last time

that you love me

Reviews

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Hello Aiden,

Your a devise, cunning, vengeful narrative is most compelling, excellent

[Jon Roggie]

Painful and strong. Nice write!

[Emma Keynes]

Wow. This poem is so deep and raw. I loved it.

I love the repetition to put strong emphasis on certain parts, like "let me in, let me in, let me in." I got chills reading this, it is so good.

[ChemicalMadness]

The blackend waves of your endless mane remind me that all is lost....loved it. Great formatting here to highlight the content. Reads quite a bit like a song as well, which is not a bad thing at all...

CM

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Powerful...intense. I love your style. You have a distinct perspective, and this is like a rant that has been rephrased into a beautiful, metaphoric universe. Well written, my friend. I look forward to reading more of you.

[Aiden]

Thank you again. I am on my way to review some of your work. I have already read a few pieces and fell in love, so this means a lot coming from you.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Thank you...I'm glad you like my stuff. It's me...that's all.

[Vria P Crow]

"You talk to me like I'm nothing
like I'm the dirt caked up in"

I can relate, dude. I FELT that almost every day. At times, I still feel that way, to be honest. However, you must keep the idea of perception in mind.

FIGURE 1: Puzzle

P e r c e i v e
E u r e k a
R o s w e l l
C a r r i e
E A Games
P a s s i o n P i t
T i m e C r u n c h
I n d i g o
O r i o n's B e l t
N e b u l a

SUGGESTION

I would recommend that you HONOR yourself if you find this Poetic Structure familiar. If not, I suggest that you do some research on the following subjects.

1. Perception
2. "Carrie," Stephen King
3. EA games: video game reference
4. Passion Pit: I recommend listening to it if you have not.

As for the rest, that is up to you if you want to know more about it :) I do not know you. I only know what I interpreted from your poem.

CONTENT

This is the Vocabulary I really LOVED

[Aiden]

Thank you for the very helpful review. I am going to look all of these things up now and familiarize myself with them. Very helpful.

[Vria P Crow]

You are very welcome! I am glad it helped! :D

Random question, but what kind of music do you listen to?

[Larul]

//Sniffles. - I scanned this poem for a minute. Not really looking at the words, but the number of your lines. I assumed it would be rather all over the place. But no. My god, reminds me just of my lover. Very powerful, I loved it. Almost brought a tear to my dry eyes.

[Aiden]

Thank you very much Larul. I know you werent too please with the last one so I appreciate your willingness to read this one and give it a chance. I am feeling my way through it.

[Zahra]

very nice. Sad, though, but expressive.

[Aiden]

Thank you

[Robbie~xoxo~]

This is a heartbreaking read, Aiden...

You showcase your talent in expressing the pain of your wounded heart... I love this, for your ink bleeds red...

Keep writing....~xo~:)

[Aiden]

Thank you Robbie. I love your writing style very much. It is something I inspire to. I need to go make some more reviews.

[Jessica Gillitzer]

I think i might be to sad right now to be reading this stuff, I am all choked up, why is it so hard to find love without the pain they don't tell you about in fairy tales. I have alot of love for this.
Jessie
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[Aiden]

Thank you Jessie. If you think about it, would we really want fairy tale romance?

[Jessica Gillitzer]

Yes and no, it's okay to be Cinderella as long as you get the prince.
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