The Bard vs. The Brute Guardian

Can I defeat HIM...

I'm just here...

Standing...

Waiting...

Silent...

Your so friendly towards me

Your smile makes me secretly smile

Your smart and sometimes bossy cause you are the president

Your adorable but...

But HE'S there, by your side

Like a brute guardian 

With his claymore, who slashes 

Anyone against their love

I'm just an Artist

With a simple sharp pen and a blank paper

An artist with different perspective of the world

So how can I come close to you, with that brute guardian by your side

But I know he's not worth of you

Cause I, myself know well your guardian...

Reviews

[samantha munning]

very open and expressive. title fits it very well

[Aianarie (INACTIVE)]

Quite an interesting poem...it inspires me.....

Thanks for sharing this great piece.

[reflectingus]

First of all, great title. It gave this piece a great beginning, and I loved the whole poem, who you make that contrast, though a writer with his pen is equally competitive as the brute guardian you talk about here. Powerful feelings, vivid expressions, well, great job.

[Amata Luna]

Cool. The flow of this poem is just great. I love the way you "narrated" a story of some kind and how you implied the might of the pen. Another good write, congratulations! ;)

[Brianna Van Zandt]

Very nice. I like the way it was written. It flows very well. Just a few critiques on grammar: When you say "Your so friendly" or "Your smart and sometimes bossy..." I realized you're using the wrong form of "your". As these would be "you are"s, they should be written "you're" instead of "your." Other than that, brilliant!