Walking Away

Slow acoustic song

Well you dazzle me and you don't know it

I'm lost in your words as you speak

And I studder as you take my breath

I might look tough, but I'm truly weak

As I realize how deep I've fallen

Swirling down your tunnel of love

I can't see light at either ends

I can't seem to rise above

Cause I've been dying

Yeah I've been dying

I never knew I'd end up like this

I've been waiting for too long

So I'll walk out of the picture

Cause it's not where I belong

Yet I can't help tripping over

Can't find a way out of this maze

And I'd like to meet someone new

But it's as hope has bribed my fate

Cause I've been dying

Yeah I've been dying

And the sad part is that I'm not sad

So tell me,

What have you done to me

And I know I've got no chance

And it makes me want it more

And I don't know if it's love

Else my past would have been flawed

What I've felt was nothing like this

And it might even hurt to say

I thought I knew so much about it

But really, I was completely astray

Cause I've been dying

Yeah I've been dying

And the sad part is that I'm not sad

So tell me,

What have you done to me

Reviews

[Kal]

I can feel you in these sad words yet beautiful lyrics..

Keep it up!

[Distantview123]

Yes, this has the cadence of a song. I write songs too (but I've not posted any here). A sad but poetic write. Nice going! ~ Robert.

[Another Poet]

It looks like a lyrics of a song? Or is it just a poem? Anyway it is really good. I like the flow.

[Lighthouse Call]

They're lyrics :) Thanks.

[Another Poet]

okay it is very good!

[Talal Hussain]

The lyrics and the composition are just awesome :-)

[Katherine Enma Pineappl..]

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Well done

This is a really nice piece~! It's going to my library~

The simple way you placed the situation was rather effective. I see that it's written straight to the point but slightly chopped to give the reader easier digestable facts presented.

Your repeating lines are very familiar though. Seems like I've heard it before.

Would love to hear this~

[......]

Wow, this would make one awesome song. I totally love this.

[Chantel]

Excellent as always, and so honest. Great piece. :)

[Meghan]

I'm a big fan of lyrical poetry and I think this piece would work great as a song with acoustic guitar! I think this is a piece many can relate to, being so deep in love you can't get out. Thanks for sharing!

[Coyote Poetry]

Great emotion in this poem. When love seem impossible. Old heart pain cannot be stopped. I like the set-up of this poem. Making each emotion important and to come alive.
"And I don't know if it's love
Else my past would have been flawed'
Desire and love can take our balance and make us feel weak and alone. Thank you for the outstanding poem. Made me think.
Coyote