Beyond Your Outside

Why can't you 

Awaken my soul 

Like the way you used to, do

Just light another

Burn your lungs out

And wreck your brain in thinking there's another, way

You try to read her

But you can't read 

The guy who blocks your vision in your mirror, no

You lack pursuing 

Your dreams 

And there's no one around to motivate you, yeah

Because there's something about you

That you don't understand

You sought for the acknowledgment

And what if it's in your hand?

You've taken what you wanted 

But you're left dead and dry inside

And no one thinks you're worth the time

To look deeper, beyond your outside

You think way too much

Within your shallow

Conversations with your own self, yeah

You give advice to

Yourself and it's

Really sad to think about it

Is it?

Is it?

Yeah

Because there's something about you

That you don't understand

You sought for the acknowledgment

And what if it's in your hand?

You've taken what you wanted 

But you're left dead and dry inside

And no one thinks you're worth the time

To look deeper, beyond your outside

Just look for the wrong things

You're already on your way

You may have the tools to lead your life

But your head has gone astray

You forgot how it feels like

To have someone get you high

'Cause she's taken what she wanted

And you're left dead and dry, yeah

Because there's something about you

That you don't understand

You sought for the acknowledgment

And what if it's in your hand?

You've taken what you wanted 

But you're left dead and dry inside

And no one thinks you're worth the time

To look deeper, beyond your outside

Why can't you 

Awaken my soul 

Like the way you used to, do

And tell me

Where is your guardian angel when you need him?

Reviews

[kersee9]

I read this as a song and the chorus is very powerful. I would use an em dash instead of the comma to separate the thoughts though. It's more abrupt. Great job!

[allie_arrowz]

sounds like a song. really nice

[Coyote Poetry]

Hard to repair wall of separation when words are spoken to create anger. I like the way you told the story in this poem. I like the desire and I could feel the struggle in the poem. I did like the ending. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Chantel]

Amazing, you are truly talented. I always love reading what you've written. Great job :)