The Swallow and The Shallow

Acoustic song - quite depressing but oh well.

So, we're back here are we? 

Right back on this road.

Looking for some notice,

And feeling so damn cold.

               

N’ I'm tired of the heart ache

That you always seem to cause

And you’re running through the breeze while,

While I seem stuck on pause.

 

Shallow. Shallow. Shallow. Girl.

 

If I'm the swallow you're the shallow

(This is your demise)

If I'm the swallow you're the shallow

(It ain’t no surprise)

If I'm the swallow you're the shallow

(You can finally, take of your disguise)

 

The swallows remind me of home

I’m a bird trapped in cage

I wrote words in a book for you

But you read a different page.

 

You’ve prolonged it for too longed

And your words they make me dizzy

While the payphone is in my hands

Yet your line is always busy

 

 

Shallow. Shallow. Shallow. Girl.

 

If I'm the swallow you're the shallow

(This is your demise)

If I'm the swallow you're the shallow

(It ain’t no surprise)

If I'm the swallow you're the shallow

(You can finally, take of your disguise)

 

 

You're obsessed over control,

And you're f*****g around my head.

You're a floating anchor,

While I’m sitting on seabed.

 

Was I not worth fighting for?

Why are you so reckless with my heart

And I chirp high in the skies

As from you I pull apart.

 

Reviews

[Katherine Enma Pineappl..]

Was I not worth fighting for?
Why are you so reckless with my heart
And I chirp high in the skies
As from you I pull apart.
-My favorite lines there

This is wonderfully sad, poetic and very intriguing. It makes me curious on how it sounds :)

Your emphasis on the shallow part was very effective as I've got an image of what (I hope) you want to portray and the repetition and use of words in your chorus effectively bring your point clearer to the reader. What I can say is that you've kind of lost me in the second to the last stanza, not as strong I suppose? But overall this is a nice piece of work :)

[Chantel]

This is great, and yes, very sad, but also beautifully poetic. The last stanza was heartbreaking. Great work. And I know I say this all the time, but you should record :) Like make a CD, seriously. Keep writing and playing! :)