Window

Is there meaning in today?
In the way
the rain pours outside the window
of this room that won't let me go.

You force me to stay
in the prison of this day.
The meaning just won't show,
there's a crack in the window.

The air can escape
through that gape
through the window.
I hear that freedom flow
but today won't let me go.

You know
there's a meaning in today
in the way you make me stay
the way your eyes glow
when you release that blow
my head against the window
the blood covered gape
the me that can escape.

I hear that freedom flow,
the air through the window.

The meaning starts to show,
the rain pours outside the window.
The meaning of today
shows through in the way
I finally let you go.

Author's Note

No particular form, this poem merely includes a TON of repetition.
{ Written during my Period 7 Poetry exam. How appropriate. >> }

Reviews

[Bryce Simonds]

I read about 6 of your other poems, and I must say, I like this one out of the ones I read. Mostly because it's shorter, and gets to the point faster. But I like the repetition you used, it was very effective in this poem. I especially liked the rain pouring outside the window. You displayed quite a picture in my mind, and since it's been raining where I live for the past month, I could see it even better. Overall good write, thanks for sharing!
-Bryce

[Eagle Cruagh]

Interesting.

Very sad. The blood and broken window
the rain are all marks of a sad and broken
life.
Beautifully written.

My rating-----100 %

------ Eagle Cruagh

[Boris Jonathan Novak]

You have a wonderful way of crafting the right words in conveying your unique imagery. Great work!

[Nish Nish the Fish]

WOW. wow wow wow.
that was great ,relaly really great!
so powerful
and meaningful
i cnat begin to describe how i felt just reading it
great great job!

[KatieDaray]

I love it! Excellent work! It grabbed me from the start and held me till the end! Good job!

[Randal Bright]

This is amazing! I love free form poetry that actually makes sense... a poem that has meaning and depth, an iceberg effect that makes the reader fill in the gaps within this piece of artwork. This is a fine piece of work and you have some great talent. I'd give you some criticism... but I find this piece of work perfect :)