Dark Dependence

I will ponder your theory of life,
its love and its hate, its triumph and strife.
I will think of your purpose and pride,
and the shadows in which you still hide.

You claim you know all,
your duty and call,
your place on this hideous Earth.

The answers and keys,
the questions and pleas,
your end as well as your birth.

This is all a game, in your mind.
Fate, to you, it cannot be kind.
You take your chances, roll the dice,
but the sum they create is never quite nice.

You're wrong when you tell me this life is a quest,
that to fight is to be like all of the rest,
my fury will set me apart.

I'm right when I tell you this life is worth living,
all of it's answers worth receiving, or giving,
tell me you will take this to heart.

I'm here for you when you cry,
to the heavens above, and the sky.
I'm by your side when you find the need,
to at last, hear my words and give heed:

"Life was never a game,
pride won't overcome shame.
Shadows won't hide the light,
don't ever depend on the night."

Reviews

[Twilight]

A very eloquent and well written poem, Ligeia! It is also rather thought-provoking and insightful.

"I'm right when I tell you this life is worth living". This line sounds particularly positive and uplifting, don't you think?

"don't ever depend on the night". These words are a bit like a warning of some kind, but the meaning is slightly ambiguous. It could be trying to warn, that we should never try to rely upon evil or bad behaviour? Clearly, the "night" is often associated with evil or sinister behaviour.

The flow and rhyme scheme are both, very good indeed. Do other readers agree, I wonder? Thankyou so much, for sharing this with us. A very worthy addition to my Group, "Twilight's Disciples"! Who will be next, to add some writing? Or perhaps, even invite a friend to join my Group?

[Allison]

This is such an amazing poem! So well written.
Amazing work.

[Livana Lowell]

As a teenage girl and a child of Godm, I always feel just this way when I talk to all these lost souls around here. No one around me ever believes in God anymore and when I ask why, it's like they're convinced of they know all and that this life isn't worth living. And all that, and it makes me mad and want to strive to prove them wrong. I know that I once felt the same way, though. I mean, there was a time that's the way I thought. You claim you know all,
your duty and call,
your place on this hideous Earth.

The answers and keys,
the questions and pleas,
your end as well as your birth.

This is all a game, in your mind.
Fate, to you, it cannot be kind.
You take your chances, roll the dice,
but the sum they create is never quite nice.

This is definately how I thought until I opened up and I got better and soon I got to feeling of the words you wrote: "Life was never a game,
pride won't overcome shame.
Shadows won't hide the light,
don't ever depend on the night."

Indeed, I really love flow and ryhme, but it takes me back to a place where I've left. It's a good feeling to realize how far you've come.

[Sarah]

LOVE the rhyme in this poem! Ahh and the rhyme scheme is great. :) :) I absolutely love rhyming in poetry (of course, only when it's done well XD) and this was awesome! Really carried your words along and made me want to keep reading! Favorite stanza: "You're wrong when you tell me this life is a quest, / that to fight is to be like all of the rest, / my fury will set me apart." Interesting, and I think quite a few people can relate! Anyway, great job with this!!!

[deeps]

I really like this write
I found it to be thought provoking
Very well written write as well.
Enjoyable read.

[Sean M. Addams]

very thought provoking piece... love the religious tones you have put into this.... overall a very cool write and the ending summons it up well.... thanks for entering this in my contest.... a very worthy piece!!!

[Ama May Cooper]

A very sensetive and beautful flowng poem.
Woven with a strange sort of silent wisdom that makes me double take and read re-read
a very well written piece , filled with intellengce and indivduality well done a very nice and pleasant read.

[Dianah]

Sounds like a conversation with God. Interesting poem. I like the ambiguity in this piece.

[Alice Oiseau]

Perfect ending lines! They are in quotes -- so is it a famous quote? Or is it your own saying?
Great poem! Speaks of an essential quality to life, and you couldn't have said it better.
Well penned.
Cheers.

[Lizanne]

Stubborn, will not acknowledge we are born with a purpose and the path to its discovery is long and we do not have all the correct directions to get there. They know precisely what is going to take place in their own little world. It is easier for some to follow the same path to the proverbial edge of a cliff and fall off than to find their own direction in this life. To realize one does not have all the answers and that we often have to fight and struggle for what we want and deserve in this life is very wise. You are a powerful writer and I thoroughly enjoyed this work of art. Go through this world with your eyes open, to do otherwise is to be blind to all life's possibilities.