Solace

I'd like to be anywhere but here,
somewhere far, and no where near
this place that overly intensifies
my need, and my longing to be one with the skies.

I want to be above the clouds,
away from streets, and noise, and crowds.
I'd like to spread my wings and soar,
away from this life that seems such a bore.

I need to look down on the Earth,
avoid its life, its death, its birth,
run away from the end as it draws near,
ascend to the Sun, where promise is clear.

Up past Mars and Pluto I'll go,
further and further, until soil turns to snow.
I'll search for existence that's better than this,
better than shadows, and darkness, abyss.

I can make it, my wings are strong,
though the journey is tough, and the way is long.
My motive will keep me up with the breeze,
where I can view planets, their forests, and seas.

I'll gain more wisdom with my eyes, my sight,
and make myself able, with eternal flight.
Death can't keep up, and although it tries,
the light will make clear to me all of its lies.

So here I start, with my feathers spread,
to a land where I won't be better off dead,
to a point far away, away from here,
a domain where intention is always clear.

Now! To that place! The one up above,
the world that is filled with acceptance, and love
the Earth that exists above the Sun,
where the light and I can live together as one.

Reviews

[Twilight]

What can I say? This is simply outstanding, Ligeia! A brilliant rhyme scheme, flow, a great deal of detail, and some fantastic imagery!

I also like your consistency, in the way you have structured this poem. I have the impression, that you dedicated quite a bit of time, to writing this? Although I have only reviewed a few of the submissions to my Contest, so far, I already have a strong feeling that this will take first or second place! Thankyou, again!

[cquig]

Wow! That was incredible. I was right there with you on your journey. I could feel the breeze and then a sense of calm, where there was no wind at all. You creadted a place I would like to go. What a beautiful job.

[lindsay]

This is really quite amazing! I would love to do all those things as well. I connected well with this mind frame and words in this poem.=]

[Vesa Lee]

This is beautiful and inspiring.
I imagine it would touch many a heart and cause a few happy tears if read at the passing of someones life.
There's no fear here, no sadness, just longing and excitement for what's ahead. ^-^
Wonderfully done.

[Nish Nish the Fish]

if only such a place existed, we'd all strive to get there, well those who realize anyway. This is a great poem, thought provoking, chocked full of wonderful imagery and magical qualities. well done!

[Lizanne]

A poetic work that flows upwards, like the magical waters of a pristine stream that flow up-stream instead of down. You create from start to finish a world of artistic words that evolve around the spirits desire to leave the lower plains of earth for the higher more intellectual spheres of the universe. So visual in description of your journey and wise in the reasons for making it. But alas, you absolutely can't go. Not that you could not do it, but we need you to stay here and write more of these brilliant words as a wakeup call to others of what they may miss if they do not stop and look around at the course we are traveling in this world, thus stalling their journey into that wonderful metaphysical world just beyond the reach of our fingertips. I will not quote a favorit line, the entire poetic work is breath taking. Keep the words flowing from that magical pen of yours.