Puppet.

Trying to avoid temptation?
Your defenses are futile,
I can seduce you with only my wits,
Give to you pieces,
Until you reliquish your whole self to me.

Trying to escape the inevitable?
You've the mind of a child,
I've grown tired of playing your petty games.
My strength is something you cannot fathom.

Trying to undermine defeat?
Perhaps I'll be swift in my task,
Show you mercy when you never thought it possible.
I can promise you'll regret what you've said this hour.

You have lost your appeal, puppet.
A beauty like mine never fades.
This mistress will tempt you, tear you apart,
Until every limb on your worthless body trembles with delight.
Control me, show me blood.
Attack me, puppet;
Carry me to heights that blind, while still you see.

I am more wonderful in the darkness of the night.

Reviews

[Twilight]

Clearly, this poem seems to be expressing a darker side to the protagonist. Indeed, in the closing oine, it reverses the traditional assumption, that a personality shines more strongly during the light of day. Indeed, this protagonist is, "more wonderful in the darkness of the night".

Unusually perhaps, for this talented writer, the poem does not appear to have a rhyme scheme. However, as I'm sure that she is aware, that would have placed a restriction on her choice of words. And of course, that may have lessened the expressive side to this poem, and made it less powerful. And what a powerful poem this is, with wording which literally taunts the reader in places, just as the protagonist seems to taunt or mock the "puppet".

The final verse is the most intense, and slightly more explict, in how the puppet is taunted. For example, it borders on the suggestion of actual violence, with a candid reference to "blood", for example! I also observed, that this verse is longer than the others. This has allowed the poet, more opportunity to depict the taunting of her puppet!

When I first read this poem, I assumed that the "puppet" was intended to represent a former lover. But, my second reading made me think otherwise! Interestingly, is seems far more likely that the "puppet" is a metaphor for either, the writer's former-self or a weaker side to her present personality. By "weaker personality", I simply mean, one which is more vulnerable or easily hurt.

It's possible, that the writer has made the identity of the "puppet" ambiguous, on purpose. Well, only the writer knows for sure! Thankyou very much, for sharing this with your fellow members of "The Dark Poetry" Group!

[deeps]

Wonderful Imagery here.
I like this and the strength and character you put into this.
This is a well written write here.
Very impressive piece.

[Sean M. Addams]

I like the concept of this piece ....the imagery , flow and detail you have put into this is well done... overall a very impressive piece.... thanks for entering this .... fav lines....You have lost your appeal, puppet.
A beauty like mine never fades.
This mistress will tempt you, tear you apart,
Until every limb on your worthless body trembles with delight.
Control me, show me blood.
Attack me, puppet;
Carry me to heights that blind, while still you see.

I am more wonderful in the darkness of the night.