Star-Struck Symphony

I decided I was lacking in the happy poetry, so I wrote this to show my brighter side :)

Star-struck symphony

Grab a sun ray

On a sunny day

And launch yourself

Into the stars

Where you'll greet the meteors

And zoom way past Mars

You'll go far out

In the galaxy

As long as you're never afraid

And you're always beside me

We'll see the aliens

And maybe stay for a chat

Before we fly away

To the constellation packs

Then we'll sneak out

To the moon

Where we'll see astronauts

In funny space cocoons

So just remember

Before I say good night

Our adventure was anything

But a dream

It's as real as you believe it is

Keep our journey in your mind's eye

And never lose the sight to see

Our lovely star struck symphony

Tonight  

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Tell me if you can picture this

Reviews

[Pax]

i agree this is a happy poem of dreams. I understand your lacking of a happy poem.
i feel that sometimes or most of the time, creating a positive vibe can create a good feeling. i like the images you used vivid and with a dream tone in it.

[RachelReaper]

thank you =)

[Jordan Easley]

Very vivid. I could imagine every detail. The imagery was well-placed and carefully thought out. The poem itself flowed pretty smoothly and it carried an almost sing-song tone. Nicely done.

[Rika]

I agree nice imagery. Keep up the good work!

[WickedPenWielder]

loved it, great work!

[deepblue04]

this is amazing! I can so picture this!!!

[Samantha Lynn]

When I read this, I took it as one of those relationship poems. I don't really know how to explain this lol but i will try. When I read this, to me it was your way of saying to the guy, whoever he is, that you never felt like what you had was real.You felt like it was all a big dream like the planets and stars in the galaxy. You can see it but that doesn't mean that it is really there.
This was made very well. It said a lot and was good use of imagry.
I hope that helped lol :)

[Owlgirl]

Great imagery :) Well written and smooth clapping rythm. Truly happy!

[K.J. Bryen]

Nice imagery! Very cute poem, I like it :)

[Mazie Tackett]

ya so much imagery who couldn't love so much expressionism in this poem its amazing

[Hidden Happiness]

i get this really vivid picture...if only i could do things like that....but yep you're right...this things are only dreams but no one said its wrong to dream, did they?:):):).