No Tears

I wrote this to no one in particular

 

No Tears

You can rip out my heart

Smash it into the floor

Stake me

Choke me

Drown me

I'll put on a fake smile

And say, "I can handle it."

But I won't cry

 

You can humiliate me

Crush my soul to nothing

Trick me

Deceive me

Hate me

I'll laugh about it

And lie, "You meant nothing." 

But I won't cry

 

You can say I'm meaningless

And try to stab me in the back

Kill me

Haunt me

Torture me

I'll spit in your face

And give you empty threats

But I will not cry

 

I will not cry

Because I will

Never

Fall to someone like you

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

I wrote this poem on an emotional fit... what do think of my emotional fit?

Reviews

[Sheila Kline]

Congratulations on your placement in the "Change The World" contest!! Your poem is filled with great emotion and a clear message of conviction!!

[RachelReaper]

thank you

[Acron 4]

There is a reason for tears young lady. They were given to you by your creator. Tears are for an emotional release. Every time you don't release the emotion that builds up in you, you hurt yourself, and over time it can lead to, high blood pressure, and heart disease just to name two. The lack of truly showing your emotion is, more then anything else pure pride...........however, you wrote a very emotional poem.....a very good poem...thanks for sharing.

[RachelReaper]

then maybe I'm too proud that way for my own good, but thank you for your review, it was very insightful.

[Mark Anthony Games (Hum..]

No Tears
(Review for Change the World Competition) Oh Yes, this is what I was looking for, packed with emotion, honesty and so easy to connect with. If the heart were poured out like gravy this is the pattern it would make. Poetry was stolen by the fancy and educated, so much art and craft was put in that meaning got lost in the over polished lines. Forget stanza, forget rhythm, forget rhyme and forget over thinking. Just let that emotion drip onto the page. Absolutely brilliant. This scored perfect ten in four categories! Love Love Love it.

[RachelReaper]

thank you so much!

[Tex]

very strong and emotional write... nice work. I really like the strength that this person has.

[RachelReaper]

thank you, I wrote this a while ago

[Tex]

I always enjoy reading your work... have been running across it for the 2 months I have been here, you are a stand out.

[RachelReaper]

thank you for that, but my name isn't in lights yet, so I'm just another writer waiting to be known

[Wonderful Letdown]

It was good, there was a mini grammatical thing that might be a good idea to change but other than that it was pretty damn good. I liked it and in a way, I could relate. It has very strong language and imagery.

When reading this, I got the image of someone who is going through a lot and though they want to cry and let it out, but they don't. They keep holding strong.

Gaaaah!! Sorry, this is my first review and I can't shake the vibe of my writing that's screaming I'm not impressed with your writing when I am impressed. Sorry, I'm gonna shut up now....

Great job and keep up the awesome work!!

[Mark Anthony Games (Hum..]

Wow, absolutely superb. You captured the moment perfectly. So much truth, so much emotion, needs to be read a few times to appreciate this. Fantastic capture.

[RachelReaper]

thank you so much :)

[Chance]

I love yourpoem! To be able to spit rage onto paper is a powerful thing.
And congrats again on another award soon you will have no time to slum with the likes of me you'll be hanging with real writers and reading real poetry. Keep up all the hard work it is paying off!

[RachelReaper]

haha, thank you :)

[JiDonnelly]

Just reading this has made me feel so much stronger, The whole piece is just packed with powerful words!
very uplifting and has made my lonely day!

Thanks!

-JiDonnelly'

[Sid]

Very interesting read this, the strength of that person is truly motivating...really like this. Great work!!

[Becca Bishop]

Emotional fits become you. I liked the whole idea of how they'll keep carrying on despite what other people think/do/say/etc to them. The only thing I really had a problem with was in the first stanza when it said "Stake me." Do we have a vampire on our hands? Does stake have some other kind of meaning that I didn't know about or am I just missing the poetic meaning of the poem? As confused as I am, I still liked it tons. Good write!

[RachelReaper]

ahaha... so you caught that, huh? Clever. No one else did, or if they did, they didn't mention it.