Demons can not only be close enough for you to touch, but for them to touch you. Excellent work.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
well said. You know, one day when i'm dead and if I can become an angel, I swear I'm hunting down ev.. read morewell said. You know, one day when i'm dead and if I can become an angel, I swear I'm hunting down every demon I ever came in contact with.
I can most definitely sympathize. They say that if one thinks they are crazy, they are not, because .. read moreI can most definitely sympathize. They say that if one thinks they are crazy, they are not, because if they were crazy, they would not know it. With this said, a general rule of thumb is that if one tells them self they are crazy, it means they are not. But by continuously telling them self they are crazy, it make make them just so. Who knows?
sounds like life, or maybe just my life, or yours, or a dream, a very disturbing dream. had plenty of those lol
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Or my imagination.
11 Years Ago
maybe, is mine any better? besides, imagination is a good thing, letting it take hold of you is the .. read moremaybe, is mine any better? besides, imagination is a good thing, letting it take hold of you is the problem XD
11 Years Ago
letting it win is a problem of mine... letting it give you panic attacks is a problem. Hm.. but what.. read moreletting it win is a problem of mine... letting it give you panic attacks is a problem. Hm.. but what is it they say? My gift is my curse.
haven't heard that one, not sure it always applies either. my gift for example is believing I can co.. read morehaven't heard that one, not sure it always applies either. my gift for example is believing I can control the temperature of faucet water, or read people's minds at random moments, or dream about places that I've never been to but someday will, things like that. you know they say the true sign of insanity is doing the same thing over and over and expecting different results; but what about doing different things over and over and expecting the same results?
"It feel like a comfort blanket but it's much too cold" may perfect the line you were going for!
This piece is quite enchanting, the metre is lovely and rather suited to the feeling you portray, of a complicated, frustrated heart full of anxiety.
Good luck Rachel.
P.s the crystal castles reference was lovely, a phrase I myself have used!
I am not associated with Emily Dickinson so I don't get the reference that you placed here.
But I do agree with the theme of the poem since it speaks of the truth. We all have our little demons out there. Some that we hide and some that we show everyone. It's like a glue with a strong connection with the skin. These demons can't be conquered if we don't give up holding onto it. (:
Haha, ranting again, aren't I?
Anyways, great poem~
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
not ranting, more so telling me what you thought, which I greatly appreciate as always Rhianne.
Betrayal, fear, loathing...this poetic piece of prose has it all for the darker kiddies. Very spooky and surreal as told from the perspective you utilized. It gives the whole thing an almost ghost-like, phantom-esque quality. Much like trying to catch a whisp of icy breath on the wind.
Nice!
Very nice. Resentment, fear, power, betrayal, all are present in this piece...! I could get lost trying figure all the meaning of it, very nicely done...!
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