Farther Away

Farther Away

A Poem by RachelReaper

Farther Away

When it holds you,

It feels like a

Security blanket,

But it's much too cold.

When you hold it,

It feels like something

Stable for once,

But it shatters

Much too easily.

You cling to it

Out of desperation,

Because nothing else

Would have you,

But the truth?

It won't have you, either.

It doesn't feel.

It doesn't care.

It never has.

 

You could once

Conjure it,

Will it towards you

To wrap around

Your bleeding lips,

Your screaming heart,

Or whatever was left.

But it was

Much too translucent

For you to ever control.

 

A glass castle

Quivering on a fault,

But it's your fault,

You summoned it here.

You didn't know,

But that's irrelevant.

You haven't the slightest

Clue the damage you've

Dealt in.

It doesn't want you,

It's after you.

It won't help you,

It devours you.

It cannot love you.

It can only destroy.

 

You think you're being

Picked up,

As you lay dying,

Your tears wiped away,

You don't understand.

It's tossing you into

The same abysmal void

It tosses every victim.

Sounding as sweet

As your most pleasant dream,

It whispers to you,

Only to rip into you later

In its own sadistic game.

It's taking a form now,

A distinctive shape.

I know, I see it, too.

It's becoming quite clear

To me now,

And to you,

 

Everyone has their demons,

But are yours close

Enough to

Touch? 

© 2013 RachelReaper


Author's Note

RachelReaper
something i wrote, i would appreciate it if you would review this. Did you get the Dickinson reference?

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Like this, the concise, strong style that contains lots of good imagery, as well as the
clever question at the end..

Posted 11 Years Ago


RachelReaper

11 Years Ago

thank you Leslie!
Demons can not only be close enough for you to touch, but for them to touch you. Excellent work.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Ethale Captor

11 Years Ago

I can most definitely sympathize. They say that if one thinks they are crazy, they are not, because .. read more
RachelReaper

11 Years Ago

mysterious!
Ethale Captor

11 Years Ago

Very, I find it interesting.
sounds like life, or maybe just my life, or yours, or a dream, a very disturbing dream. had plenty of those lol

Posted 11 Years Ago


Invisible

11 Years Ago

haven't heard that one, not sure it always applies either. my gift for example is believing I can co.. read more
RachelReaper

11 Years Ago

you have reverse insanity, yet not quite sane lol
Invisible

11 Years Ago

I thought as much, or did I? lol
"It feel like a comfort blanket but it's much too cold" may perfect the line you were going for!
This piece is quite enchanting, the metre is lovely and rather suited to the feeling you portray, of a complicated, frustrated heart full of anxiety.

Good luck Rachel.

P.s the crystal castles reference was lovely, a phrase I myself have used!

Posted 11 Years Ago


RachelReaper

11 Years Ago

thank you Willow
I am not associated with Emily Dickinson so I don't get the reference that you placed here.
But I do agree with the theme of the poem since it speaks of the truth. We all have our little demons out there. Some that we hide and some that we show everyone. It's like a glue with a strong connection with the skin. These demons can't be conquered if we don't give up holding onto it. (:
Haha, ranting again, aren't I?
Anyways, great poem~

Posted 11 Years Ago


RachelReaper

11 Years Ago

not ranting, more so telling me what you thought, which I greatly appreciate as always Rhianne.
Rhianne Ney

11 Years Ago

(; thanks Rachel
I was wondering while reading...what is it? What is it? Naturally, her own demons. Quite an artistic write. I really like it, Rachel.

Posted 11 Years Ago


RachelReaper

11 Years Ago

thank you, Damien, and I'm glad you got what I was talking about.
Betrayal, fear, loathing...this poetic piece of prose has it all for the darker kiddies. Very spooky and surreal as told from the perspective you utilized. It gives the whole thing an almost ghost-like, phantom-esque quality. Much like trying to catch a whisp of icy breath on the wind.
Nice!

Posted 11 Years Ago


RachelReaper

11 Years Ago

thanks Dean
Very nice. Resentment, fear, power, betrayal, all are present in this piece...! I could get lost trying figure all the meaning of it, very nicely done...!

Posted 11 Years Ago


RachelReaper

11 Years Ago

thank you for reading :D
realmwriter

11 Years Ago

Your most welcome...!
I liked the reference very much, and I like how it makes the reader think. Great job

Posted 11 Years Ago


RachelReaper

11 Years Ago

thanks Alisha.

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