Farther Away

Farther Away

When it holds you,

It feels like a

Security blanket,

But it's much too cold.

When you hold it,

It feels like something

Stable for once,

But it shatters

Much too easily.

You cling to it

Out of desperation,

Because nothing else

Would have you,

But the truth?

It won't have you, either.

It doesn't feel.

It doesn't care.

It never has.

 

You could once

Conjure it,

Will it towards you

To wrap around

Your bleeding lips,

Your screaming heart,

Or whatever was left.

But it was

Much too translucent

For you to ever control.

 

A glass castle

Quivering on a fault,

But it's your fault,

You summoned it here.

You didn't know,

But that's irrelevant.

You haven't the slightest

Clue the damage you've

Dealt in.

It doesn't want you,

It's after you.

It won't help you,

It devours you.

It cannot love you.

It can only destroy.

 

You think you're being

Picked up,

As you lay dying,

Your tears wiped away,

You don't understand.

It's tossing you into

The same abysmal void

It tosses every victim.

Sounding as sweet

As your most pleasant dream,

It whispers to you,

Only to rip into you later

In its own sadistic game.

It's taking a form now,

A distinctive shape.

I know, I see it, too.

It's becoming quite clear

To me now,

And to you,

 

Everyone has their demons,

But are yours close

Enough to

Touch? 

Author's Note

something i wrote, i would appreciate it if you would review this. Did you get the Dickinson reference?

Reviews

[MOON]

Striking poem especially liked the way you wrapped it up.letting loose the demons.!

[RachelReaper]

thank you MOON

[InsanityWriter]

Amazing and that last bit is quite thought-provoking... Excellent work. :)

[RachelReaper]

thank you :)

[AlwaysCasey]

The last stanza was amazing I loved the whole thing too. Great writing.

[The dark story]

the last stanza just was so thought provoking...i must say that when i was reading it...there are some lines which just blew me away...awesome write and so is your poem's theme!!!
i think we all have a demon and an angel on our sides...and according to me,they always want to touch us in order to guide us in their own particular path. but it's our idiosyncrasy which brings them close enough to touch us!!!...again...BRILLIANT WRITE!!

[Zahra]

very nice. Enjoyed reading this. Thanks for sharing.

[Surrealist]

My first take was that it has a lot of excess, but I read it again and I am not sure if that's the right way to put it... Im gonna try though: the physical length is okay but the ideas are not exactly contained, like in the last stanza you do a good job with a complete idea but i feel like there are some places where you leave us hanging and it's too abstract for me to connect. For example, you could conjure it,.... then it's too translucent for control, and I'm still seeing 'it' as the blanket-like thing. maybe I'm not sure what you mean exactly, but 'it' is personal fears/demons? or hope? anyways, it's very creative and figurative and i like the ending a lot.

[RachelReaper]

I guess, personally, its hard to explain what "it" is. It can be physical, mental, for for me its all very real (too real). But for my audience, I left it open ended for the reason that I wanted you to relate to it in your own way and make your own interpretation out of it, and its abstract because "it" can be so many different things. It can be hopes, dreams, fears, demons, things in your life you don't understand or once lost.

[Lux]

Great poem, I like it :)

[Poussiere D'Ange]

your poems are ones I look forward to reading Reaper...It deals with things that can make your head spin, that can make you think about the dark realms of reality, that can inspire you and pull you up....your poems are amazing, and as for this one, i really don't have words for it:):):D.

[Death]

Deep. I love it, great job. :)

[RachelReaper]

thanks :D

[LunarSong]

I love your great use of adjectives :)