There You Are Again

my attempt at a girl-ish punk rock song

There You Are Again

How many times

Topping today

Have I told you

To stay away

But no

You just

Can't wait

To get under my skin

Again

 

How much time

Was wasted

Spent on you

To make your exit

But I have to say

You're relentless

*For reals?*

 

Because every time

I turn around

There you are

Following without a sound

A shadow, nothing more

Who needs to find some freaking

Solid ground

 

Dude, this is getting weird

Not to sound like a jerk

But the way you lurk

It's not sexy...

It's just creepy...

 

So here's to another

F*****g girl

To tell another

F*****g boy

To take a hike

 

But that stupid

F*****g girl

And that same

F*****g boy

Can't seem to take a hint

And get it right

 

*Oh, so what, now you're telling me it's the circle of life?*

 

Because every time

I turn around

There you are

Following without a sound

A shadow, nothing more

Who needs to find some freaking

Solid ground

 

Because every time

I turn around

There you are

Following without a sound

A shadow, nothing more

Who needs to find some f*****g

Solid ground

 

Dude, seriously

Not to sound like a jerk

But the way you lurk

Is not sexy

Trust me

It's just creepy

 

*What the hell are you doing?*

 

Author's Note

the italicized words represent talking instead of singing. well, this was my attempt at a girl-ish punk rock song, but give me your honest opinion about it. I thought it was kind of Avril L. or something Pink-like when I was writing it. Opinions? Please review.

Reviews

[Jessie]

This is pretty dang awsome!
If it was a song i daresay i would listen to it :D

[RachelReaper]

thank you! :)

[Moon]

Honestly , I think it's nicely written .

[RachelReaper]

thanx

[Moon]

You are welcome !

[Alexa Tasch]

I like it and maybe its because I don't have a tune in my head I think some of the lines are two short and some of them could be combined, but I really did like it. The lyrics had emotion and fit the idea of a punk rock song. Overall it was great!

[Mark Anthony Games (Hum..]

Sorry I am having issues reviewing. I think WC is having some tech issues. This peice is extreamly raw. Its like everything is happeningbefore my eyes (Live). I doubt the peice woird work without such intensity. I guess what I liked moast (If I may be so bold) is the momentary lapse of sanity running through the narrator. I think the views would have changed upon refflection but being right there is the moment and haveing the ability to capture static response, nothing short of perfect! Great job

[RachelReaper]

don't worry! I lose my sanity at least five times a day, however if I didn't lose it, I'm almost certain I wouldn't have chosen to be a writer.

[Lonely Islander]

Well reaper, its different from your other stuff but it's like aah-mazing different...definitely it had the punk feel to it and if this was recoreded, it would end up im the Billboard100 chart. A awesome song reaps! Loved it!:-):-):-D.

[RachelReaper]

thank you!

[sheila.j]

I liked it :) definetly had that punk rockish feel to it! Good job!

[RachelReaper]

that's exactly what I was going for.

[InsanityWriter]

Nice. :) It sounds very Avril-like, so you got what you were shooting for. ^_^ I liked it, especially the ending. In short, this was awesome. (;

[RachelReaper]

thank ya

[The Invisible Girl]

I agree with everyone. I can see Avril L. singing this song. Good job! :)

[RachelReaper]

thanx