There You Are Again

my attempt at a girl-ish punk rock song

There You Are Again

How many times

Topping today

Have I told you

To stay away

But no

You just

Can't wait

To get under my skin

Again

 

How much time

Was wasted

Spent on you

To make your exit

But I have to say

You're relentless

*For reals?*

 

Because every time

I turn around

There you are

Following without a sound

A shadow, nothing more

Who needs to find some freaking

Solid ground

 

Dude, this is getting weird

Not to sound like a jerk

But the way you lurk

It's not sexy...

It's just creepy...

 

So here's to another

F*****g girl

To tell another

F*****g boy

To take a hike

 

But that stupid

F*****g girl

And that same

F*****g boy

Can't seem to take a hint

And get it right

 

*Oh, so what, now you're telling me it's the circle of life?*

 

Because every time

I turn around

There you are

Following without a sound

A shadow, nothing more

Who needs to find some freaking

Solid ground

 

Because every time

I turn around

There you are

Following without a sound

A shadow, nothing more

Who needs to find some f*****g

Solid ground

 

Dude, seriously

Not to sound like a jerk

But the way you lurk

Is not sexy

Trust me

It's just creepy

 

*What the hell are you doing?*

 

Author's Note

the italicized words represent talking instead of singing. well, this was my attempt at a girl-ish punk rock song, but give me your honest opinion about it. I thought it was kind of Avril L. or something Pink-like when I was writing it. Opinions? Please review.

Reviews

[The dark story]

i have never read a girlish punk rock song before but i find it coool and a bit funny the way you have penned it

[RachelReaper]

lol thank you :)

[Muhammad Qasim]

the flow goes well and repetition suited the poem as an overall approach.. nice work

[RachelReaper]

thank you

[Muhammad Qasim]

np

[Mary]

I'm not familiar with punk rock song writing, but I like the write overall. The repetition works and the subject is creepy-good. Like this one alot.

[RachelReaper]

thanks :)

[Chidoriflower]

Stalkers...I used to be one...this is freakin cool. Don't worry. I don't stalk anymore. It definitely reminds me of Avril L. "But the way you lurk is not sexy trust me it's just creepy." Lol. :D

[RachelReaper]

:)

[Shadey Jadey]

I love love love it!!! The twisted f**k you sense is wonderful.

[RachelReaper]

thanks!

[Ohhhwillow]

I like the f**k you aspect to this, nice! i'm a huge punk rock fan and definitely I found this more Avril Lavigne style than the prior but it brought me back to my girly younger years and I definitely still think this is good. :)

[RachelReaper]

thanks!

[de_maruf]

good work

[Ethale Captor]

It is easy to keep a beat and tune, and the talking pieces make it original. Well done.

[RachelReaper]

thanks!

[Ethale Captor]

No problem.

[ChinAllen]

I like it. I could kind hear it in a sing-song way as I kept reading it. I like the language , too, it read really well.

[RachelReaper]

thank you

[Lino Rie]

I like it. I tried to think of the music in my head and I would listen to this if it was a song.

[RachelReaper]

thanks!