Church Top

inspired by what I see when i look out my window

Church Top

Tall, silver cross

Upright on the church top

Snowfall attacks with pure white bullets from all sides

Icy shards stab deep,

Drawing blood

How

Do

You

Stand so strong?

Author's Note

There is this Church outside my window and today was the first day of snow in my town, which inspired me to write this. Hope you enjoyed and you will review :) also, the picture of the church is not the church outside my window, its just that I needed a picture...

Reviews

[Clockwork]

That would be a really awesome image to be able to look at. All I have outside is my window is a long steep road down my hill; it goes out to the main road where all the old steal mills are.

I liked your description of the cross. It was also nice that you described the snow as attacking the cross. That gave a natural element a deeper personality.

[RachelReaper]

thank you for your review :) and steel mills could be an interesting topic, I've never heard anyone write a poem about those, yet.

[Clockwork]

Well, I may have made a brief mention to them in another poem of mine that is on WC, but I have not said too much about them.

[RachelReaper]

:)

[Joshua Haring-Kaye]

A good poem, expand on it though. Good Job. May God bless you:)

[RachelReaper]

thank you

[Mark Anthony Games (Hum..]

(Review for Change the World Comp) Are you implying that the holly ground and godly foundation give the Cross the strendgth to stand. Or shall we say the passion and ingenuity of man to build such a church gave the potential for something sacred to be placed upon it.

[RachelReaper]

a little of both

[Mark Anthony Games (Human Voice)]

lol

[Ohhhwillow]

I love this imagery, can an annotation be made that is critical of the church and religious institutions or is this purely descriptive?

[RachelReaper]

metaphorical and descrptive

[vspjaguar]

Nice! I like the way you describe things.You have good creativity.

[RachelReaper]

thank you

[Jessie]

I love how you use description. Its also an interesting thought! I really enjoyed this :)

[Lino Rie]

I wish I had something cool to look at through my window. All I can see out of mine is a blue house and trees. love your poem.

[Horizon K.]

Haha snow attacking a cross ... Very interesting image & fun read!

[RachelReaper]

thank you!

[Rob Santana]

Wow that's crazy. I also live across the street from a church. Those bells ring all the time it drives me insane. Rachel you are a very talented writer :)

[RachelReaper]

thank you!

[Ethale Captor]

A short but outstanding poem. Once again, inspiration shines through your talents.

[RachelReaper]

:)

[sheila.j]

Beautiful. Love how it is short but very descriptive at the same time