"Slipping your soul through the pores / Of your cold sweat skin" - definitely my favourite line. I think it conveys the tone of the whole piece very well. How easily what was good can be corrupted. What should be good takes on attributes of its foil. For me I almost get a modern feel to this as well, as if this terminology could be used for those among us today.
The children of Seth. You have written about something that very few people research on this site, I would guess!! This is such an awesome write, that I had to check your age again. lol
My favorite verse on the Nephilim in the bible: "Do not neglect to show hospitality to strangers, for thereby some have entertained angels unawares." -Hebrews 13:2
I don't about the evil eyes and demon horns, for they were revered for their power over the daughters of man and their presence when Earth was given unto plague and war. I'm sure it was not intended to be a research tool, this poem, but I like it nonetheless. xoxo -Mark
*sighs* Oh Nephilim, dear sweet Nephilim. Half-angel, half-human. Love them, and anything else supernatural (I think I mention this too much...) This poem was just...wow. The length seem to be exactly right, and the flow of the poem is perfect. Your take on Nephilim's was different from others that write stories about them.
Cassandra Clare tells a tale of Nephilim's that fight other supernatural creatures. Demons, vampires, etc.
Becca Fitzpatrick tells a story of a girl who's a Nephilim, that falls in love with a fallen angel, the of course, has to stop a war between Nephilim and the fallen.
I could probably go on and on with stories such as this, but they all show the Nephilim's as heroes or heroines that save the world, or battle other different angel species, but in this poem you've created, you take on them was, well, dark and evil and that's what I love about it! It's unique and a totally different intake on them, and it's just awesome!
Fantastic and amazing! Wonderfully written!
I have to say, I was extremly impressed by this poem. I have a small obsession with fallen angels myself, and the fact that you knew about Nephilim was enough to impress me as it is. Your take on them was rather interesting as well. I have not seen that many dark takes on them, and I would say that yours was very well done. Fantastic wording and excelent imagery
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