Just This Once For You

yeah, something that I wrote

Just This Once For You

I swore I'd never cry

But just this once for you...

Since you can't look into my eyes

I'll cry

I'll cry for our lost childhood

I'll cry more for yours than mine

I'll cry

I'll cry because all that's left behind

Is a stone etched with letters in the ground

And red petals scattered all around

And a mournful trumpet sound

Oh, God, I swore I'd never cry

What's the point when a waterfall streaming down my face can't bring you back

No matter how hard I've tried

But now you deserve a couple tears from me, too

So I swear to you that just this once I'll cry

I'll cry

I'll cry because that shouldn't have been our lives

I'll cry because you shouldn't have been the one to die

Shouldn't have been the sacrifice

Shouldn't have met an early demise

Should've been able to live out your whole life

And though there's nothing left for you I can do

I must say good bye, my friend

One day we'll cross the same bridge again

But in the meantime and just this once for you

I will cry

Author's Note

please review

Reviews

[Tex]

Wow a powerful piece. I love the structure, the meter, the message. Very heartfelt, the emotion rings so true it makes me think this is based a real life experience. If it is, thank you for sharing this. If not, then you are very good at imagining how you might feel in these circumstances. Either way it is a magnificent write.

You might enjoy a poem I wrote "Don't Leave" it touches on a similar theme.

Great write, I loved it.

[Ella]

This is so beautiful, so sad... it shows the emotions here very well. Amazing.

[Felecia]

Okay....this poem almost made me cry. This poem is seriously poem and beautifully written. Thank you so much for sharing Rachel

[Chance]

Wow Rachel this is powerful. The narrator was obviously affected by a shared event in the past and still struggles with the impact. I can feel the anguish.

[C.C. Marx]

beautiful poem, great job!

[Howard Blacklove]

A little said with an interesting layout. I thought the flow of this poem was the most interesting. I often notice that you have a lyrical style to your poetry writing. Have you ever thought about writing some lyrics maybe even some music? Especially this line, It seems very musical

I must say good bye, my friend
One day we'll cross the same bridge again

Overall I enjoyed reading this thoroughly especially since I can relate to the sudden death of close ones.

[RachelReaper]

i have written some lyrics

[Howard Blacklove]

Thats great. I can tell.

[RachelReaper]

:)

[Baby Ricochet]

Beautiful melancholy piece Rachel. Great job.

[JiDonnelly]

I thought of my brother.

Firstly I am sorry for your loss sweet, and secondly what a beautiful piece you have here, so heartfelt and packed with emotion.
I read the whole thing with gravel in my voice, needless to say, I cried.
I have never cried before during a piece, this was very moving.
Very very beautiful indeed.
Big ups, Subbed'

-JiDonnelly'

[RachelReaper]

thank you, poetry is meant to move people and if I could get that much of an emotional response from you... that's what all of us aim to do at some point. Seriously, thank you, and I am so, so sorry for your brother. Losing someone is... beyond words.

[Jack Reaper]

wow, could really feel the despair of the loss in this. im pretty much speechless, which is hard to do... nicely done.

[RachelReaper]

thank you for your time.

[Phillitup]

I have a question. Was this written for someone or just kind of random? This reminds me of a little boy I knew. Our parents worked together and he dies of cancer. He shouldn't have gone and so I very much connect with your poem. I try not to... but sometimes I just have to remember him.

Phillitup

[RachelReaper]

it was written for someone, but this didn't recently happen.

[Phillitup]

When? Who? I'm ready for a good story. :)

[RachelReaper]

sorry, no up to it. Trust me, I'm not trying to be rude, my not telling has got everything to do with me and nothing to do with you.

[Phillitup]

okay! thts fine with me! If you were wondering...the fragment of don't turn the light's out that i posted is part of the book I'm writing based on the boy that I knew... :)

[RachelReaper]

oh, ok, I'll be sure to check that out later, promise