Just This Once For You

yeah, something that I wrote

Just This Once For You

I swore I'd never cry

But just this once for you...

Since you can't look into my eyes

I'll cry

I'll cry for our lost childhood

I'll cry more for yours than mine

I'll cry

I'll cry because all that's left behind

Is a stone etched with letters in the ground

And red petals scattered all around

And a mournful trumpet sound

Oh, God, I swore I'd never cry

What's the point when a waterfall streaming down my face can't bring you back

No matter how hard I've tried

But now you deserve a couple tears from me, too

So I swear to you that just this once I'll cry

I'll cry

I'll cry because that shouldn't have been our lives

I'll cry because you shouldn't have been the one to die

Shouldn't have been the sacrifice

Shouldn't have met an early demise

Should've been able to live out your whole life

And though there's nothing left for you I can do

I must say good bye, my friend

One day we'll cross the same bridge again

But in the meantime and just this once for you

I will cry

Author's Note

please review

Reviews

[Tex]

Wow a powerful piece. I love the structure, the meter, the message. Very heartfelt, the emotion rings so true it makes me think this is based a real life experience. If it is, thank you for sharing this. If not, then you are very good at imagining how you might feel in these circumstances. Either way it is a magnificent write.

You might enjoy a poem I wrote "Don't Leave" it touches on a similar theme.

Great write, I loved it.

[Aysia]

Wow, just wow.
The emotional tone of this poem is purely amazing and just BEAUTIFUL

[RachelReaper]

thank you :)

[Mary]

Beautifully sung, beautiful and so sad. Saying that final goodby can only bring tears, no matter what one has promised.

[Steven Cash]

How could we not review this?

So deep and emotional
90/100

[Moon]

This is very sad . All the emotion in this piece is moving and it touches the heart making the reader cry with sympathy for the aching soul who has lost their loved one .

[Alexa Tasch]

Oh my god! This is so sad but beautiful!! The emotion in it is overpowering and is delivered well. Wonderfully written!!

[Whitney Kleinhuizen]

I love it! Deeply emotional! Definitely tugs at the heart and feelings. Sad yet well written. Great job!

[The Invisible Girl]

Wow! this is really cool and shows lots of emotion!! Very good!! 100/100 :D

[Castonovia]

Wow, such depth and intense emotion... sincerely beautiful with such truth and heart, almost made me shed a tear, powerful, well penned piece indeed ;)

[Pax]

its like a song of goodbye and heartache...
indeed beautifully written...

[AleyshaRosa]

Beautiful, Rachel.
I want to cry for... Well for all of it.
You know, I actually really like the repetition of "I'll cry" it stupendously adds to the piece.
Thanks for sharing =]
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