Just This Once For You

yeah, something that I wrote

Just This Once For You

I swore I'd never cry

But just this once for you...

Since you can't look into my eyes

I'll cry

I'll cry for our lost childhood

I'll cry more for yours than mine

I'll cry

I'll cry because all that's left behind

Is a stone etched with letters in the ground

And red petals scattered all around

And a mournful trumpet sound

Oh, God, I swore I'd never cry

What's the point when a waterfall streaming down my face can't bring you back

No matter how hard I've tried

But now you deserve a couple tears from me, too

So I swear to you that just this once I'll cry

I'll cry

I'll cry because that shouldn't have been our lives

I'll cry because you shouldn't have been the one to die

Shouldn't have been the sacrifice

Shouldn't have met an early demise

Should've been able to live out your whole life

And though there's nothing left for you I can do

I must say good bye, my friend

One day we'll cross the same bridge again

But in the meantime and just this once for you

I will cry

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Tex]

Wow a powerful piece. I love the structure, the meter, the message. Very heartfelt, the emotion rings so true it makes me think this is based a real life experience. If it is, thank you for sharing this. If not, then you are very good at imagining how you might feel in these circumstances. Either way it is a magnificent write.

You might enjoy a poem I wrote "Don't Leave" it touches on a similar theme.

Great write, I loved it.

[vspjaguar]

such deep thoughts at this young age! thank you for sharing this piece.

[Acron 4]

I don't attend funerals any longer. Better, I think, to console the living. Way to many of my friends are dead. I cried for every one of them. I decided that I would try and be a better friend before they moved on. hope that I have.......great poem....thanks for sharing

[RachelReaper]

thank you

[Autumn de Rue]

Oh wow. I wish I could think of something more to say than wow, but this poem is just beautiful. I love it's timing and the way it's set up. This may just be the Les Miserables feels talking, but I feel like this has a very Empty Chairs at Empty Tables feeling about it, but a with a little less survivor's guilt. Somehow this sparked very detailed images and nowadays nothing I've been able to find has sparked that. Thank you for writing this. It's... breathtaking.

[RachelReaper]

wow, thank you so much for saying that!

[ForeverNever]

"I swore I'd never cry"
Moral of this: it's hard to be strong.

[RachelReaper]

exactly, but sometimes you have to if everyone you care about is falling apart. sometimes you have to be strong even when you don't want to be is what I've learned.

[Jem Sagcal]

It's so sad, but so beautiful word for word. This was very good.

[RachelReaper]

thank you:) also, your profile pic made me LOL

[Ethale Captor]

A beautiful write.

[RachelReaper]

thank you so much

[Audrey Howitt]

Well done!! I don't know your work, but I enjoyed this a bunch!

[RachelReaper]

thanks :)

[WingsToFly]

It's a beautiful poem.

[DrD]

A well structured, meaningful work, Rachel, that I truly appreciated reading. Thank you for creating it for us.

[RachelReaper]

anytime :) thank you