Shining Down on a 45

this is a tribute to my favorite band

Shining Down on a 45

I'm staring down the barrel

Of a 45

What in God's name have I done

To my life

I lift the bottle to my lips

Take one sip

Let it slip

Watch the shards shatter across the floor

 

I see the drinks and all the friends

The drugs and all the fans

The reminiscent nostalgia makes it seem like

I'm swimming through the ashes of another life

There is no real reason

To accept the pain

Or take the blame

One pull and it's the end of my game

 

But to Shine Down on this

45 clenched in my fist

Is hope and a bold, fire-driven light

You gave me this reason to survive

But I thought I'd never see you walk

Through my door again

And now I see the shock

Written clearly all over your face

You're horrified and don't know what to say

 

So you slice through the thick darkness

My 45 disinigrates to dust

Taking my hand you lead me away from

A past of pure disgust

And now I vow to you that unless

Both our sparks flicker to a stop

That dreaded 45 will never reconstruct

 

 

 

  

 

 

 

Author's Note

I wrote this song for my favorite band, ShineDown, and my favorite song by them titled "45" the underlined words are ShineDown's from their song 45 and I don't own the rights to the underlined words, however, i wanted to incorporate them in this tribute poem. When I listen to this song, this is what I picture, please go listen to the song 45 before or after listening to this, and also please review :)

Reviews

[Phantom.Bite]

This poem actually put me in mind of one of my favorite, All That Remains, songs. I think that it is awesome that you have done a tribute for your band and congrats on winning Best Overall. :)

[Dark Rider]

LOVE THIS SONG!!! I love how you wrote this. It's absolutely amazing!

[RachelReaper]

thank you

[Dark Rider]

You're welcome!

[The dark story]

i have heard that band's songs(and i really liked it) and i'll surely listen this one too...
anyway.i should say it's a great tribute to the band.......the diction have just vivified your thoughts......the last two stanzas were just so vivid and touching....

"Is hope and a bold, fire-driven light
You gave me this reason to survive".......
that lines signifies how much their songs meant to you.......
hats off to you for writing such a great poetry and filling it up with few musical elements....great work!!!!.and yepp.i agree HowardBlackLove.it's not easy to invite a musical element in the writing but you've done very well.......KEEP IT UP!!!!!!!

[Howard Blacklove]

I really liked the poem even though I havent listened to the band. Writing lyrics isnt easy especially since you are inviting a musical element to writing which can complicate things but you obviously pulled it off very well. I think the piece is very suspenseful. We start off with a person contemplating suicide and then end with that person being saved by the random presence of a loved one. It has a great build up to a relieving ending. On a music note, some of the lyrics do remind me of Pink Floyd a little bit especially their material off of The Wall since it has a lot to do with depression ,drug/alcohol abuse and suicide contemplation especially the part ;

I see the drinks and all the friends
The drugs and all the fans
The reminiscent nostalgia makes it seem like
I'm swimming through the ashes of another life

Great work Rachel, I write a lot of lyrics as I love to write and play it and I can tell you that you rock.

[MachinaWriter]

Love that song, and this is a wonderful tribute to the poem. Reading this I think you might enjoy reading my compilation, which is found on here as a book called A Tragic Life. Its a bit of an autobiography in the form of poetry. Some of the lines in this remind me of some of the stuff I talk about in those poems. This was very well written, and you incorporated those lyrics into your own work flawlessly. You definitely have a skill. Only having read two of your poems, so far, I'm already becoming a fan. Thanks for sharing this awesome poetic tribute. ^^

[RachelReaper]

flattering, thank you

[Jack Reaper]

never seen that done before, quite interesting. throughly enjoyed

[RachelReaper]

thank you

[Craba]

Goodness, one powerful write, also deep.

[Natasha]

I've never seen a poem before that has incorporate lyrics from a song and working around that and creating your own poem- quite clever and pretty good rendition ---shinedown has been one of my favorite bands for many years now

[SwagMaster]

I love these lyrics. Cleverly constructed, with a deep emotional message. I wouldn't be too surprised if you became a professional song writer some day. You certainly have the talent.

[RachelReaper]

:) thank you

[Mary]

good write- good lyrics.