War

Sad poem

War

Can you please

Explain to me

When it all

Went to hell

When we stopped

Caring and sharing

For each other?

We're always attacking

Cat scratching,

Loud yelling

Never stopping

For fear we would

Give in to all our sorrow

Was all of our

Love just borrowed?

Never really ours

Never really yours

Never really mine

How is that fair?

Where is our share?

When did it start?

Where will it end?

Do we really expend

So much energy

Trying to get even?

Are we ever even?

Or are we beaten

And cheated

And defeated?

Aren't we tired

Of this war?

Aren't we sick of

Coming back for more?

When all it is

Is an uneven score

Never to be settled

But don't get me wrong

I'll never go along

And surrender

Never be a white flag holder

I'll go as long

As you can

I'll never show

A weakness

For your ego

This will go on forever

Even though I wish

We had never

Gone to such

A hard core

Kind of heartless gore

That is our

War

 

Author's Note

This isn't about me, but about my uncle and ex-aunt who have had a horrible divorce. It meant a lot to me, because I went to stay with my uncle in FL and I heard him talking about how my ex-aunt was effecting my two cousins and I wanted to wanted to to write this as sort of in my uncle's point of view. What do you guys think of it? Please review.

Reviews

[Hidden Happiness]

This was really a strong piece and reading the description, i think it perfectly describes a bad kinda divorce...but if u think of it as the wars going on around the world, i think it describes that beautifully too although u didnt mean to write that...i gues...ahhh i talk too much dont i...lol anyway this was realy good:-):-) great job:-):-D.

[murrill]

Great job!

[sierrasparks91]

nice flow written amazingly good job :)

[RachelReaper]

thank you for your kind words:)

[sierrasparks91]

your welcome :)

[Baby Ricochet]

Great job! Nice flow

[RachelReaper]

thank you :D

[MOON]

Poignant deep write about divorce.

[RachelReaper]

yes... its so sad that it effects not only the two people in the divorce

[Elege]

Reminds me of when my parents got their divorce. I still do not fully understand what the f**k happened, all I know is.. they never should have been together.

[Belinda]

I love the short lines. i don't know why, it makes it more, serious, like a rant you wish you could say. or the chopped thoughts. I like it. its great.

[Celestial Witch Child]

I really think you did a wonderful job on this poem. It's a good reflection of how times and relationships change. I'm sorry that you and your family are going through this. Stay strong.

[RachelReaper]

as always :)

[Pax]

good job.. you reflected it like it was not really meant to be... what i hate about divorce is that the children will be affected and overwhelmed of the effects of the separation.. I hope your cousins are doing well and coping up...
great write!

[RachelReaper]

they are coping, and thanks so much for the review :)

[The dark story]

pretty much touching and true....a very strong poem...great work!!!!!!!!!