I think this is a good piece. It is very well put together and I can tell you spent a lot of effort on this aside from being naturally talented. I love how you relate to fear as something you must battle and conquer as if in a battle. Aside from that, Its very inspirational and moving.
I love this one! Mind if I play with it ? I would like to record it if you don't mind!
Posted 12 Years Ago
12 Years Ago
sorry, but no. This work is mine and mine alone.
12 Years Ago
fair enough, just thought it was powerful enough to make a great spoken word piece, I even heard the.. read morefair enough, just thought it was powerful enough to make a great spoken word piece, I even heard the music that was going to be behind it while reading it in my head... that happens so rarely that I was excited, I understand.
I loved this.
When read it, and this is probably just me, I didn't just see the enemy as fear but I saw him as kind of difficultly in life. And then I saw the battle field as life going on and constantly changing. and the enemy is just that bump in the road. I think my favorite stanza was, "It's better to live One moment of Noble bravery Than a lifetime Being cowardly And forever Live together Die alone" IDKY? lol I just thought is was very nice and true to life. to my life. :) Great work!
Posted 12 Years Ago
12 Years Ago
thank you for the review, and I'm glad you could relate to it :)
lol, I love your author's note! A great battle cry to charge a world hiding behind the sidelines! Fear the one contender that empowers you the second you stand to face it. Good write Good write...!!
Wow! This piece was very different. The format was new, original, and kool. I liked the message behind this. It's inspirational, and fun to read. A great change of format, and message. I loved this piece, and didn't see a flaw. "FLAWLESS VICTORY"!
I love this piece, its so different from the usual lovey dovy poems that normally go around. Its a great big gush of fresh air. Good job! And it is true, never give up! If you write more poems and stories like this then you will do great! Promise :)
You are very welcome, if you get a chance, you should read my work as well. You may like it. I think.. read moreYou are very welcome, if you get a chance, you should read my work as well. You may like it. I think it would entertain you :)
Hey!!!!! My name is Rachel, and my unofficial last name is Reaper. I am 14 years old. Blood and kisses to all who review my work, I appreciate it so much and couldn't express to you how much it means .. more..